Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免使用口头语“umm”，并且句子结构可以更自然流畅。可以简洁明了地介绍自己是学生，专业是什么，并简要描述学习的感受。

例: I am currently a university student majoring in artificial manufacturing. The course load is quite heavy, so I often feel tired by the end of the day.

提案: 回答中重复强调自己是学生显得冗余，且语法不够准确。应直接回答问题，说明自己没有工作，日常生活主要是学习，并用连词使句子更连贯。

例: I don't have a job because I am still a student. My daily routine mainly involves studying and going to the library.

提案: 回答中重复信息较多，且表达不够地道。应直接评价学习环境，避免重复自己是学生的事实，并使用更自然的表达。

例: Although I don't work, my university provides an excellent study environment with a strong academic atmosphere.

提案: 回答内容较丰富，但语法有误，如“two huge library”应为“two huge libraries”。可以使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I enjoy studying at my university because it has two huge libraries that are always full of students. Since I prefer quiet places, I go to the library every day to study.

提案: 回答中有口头语“umm”，且表达不够清晰。应更准确地表达未来计划，避免重复，并使用更合适的词汇。

例: In the future, I plan to work in my hometown Shanghai in a job related to my major, mechanical engineering, which I find very interesting.

× It has a full of study atmosphere.

✓ It has a full study atmosphere.

这里的 'a full of study atmosphere' 结构不正确，'full' 作为形容词直接修饰名词时不需要 'of'，正确表达是 'a full study atmosphere'。

× there are two huge library in my school

✓ there are two huge libraries in my school

'library' 是可数名词，复数形式应为 'libraries'，因为前面有数量词 'two'，所以应使用复数形式。

× I like the place where it's peaceful and quiet so I head to the library every day.

✓ I like the place where it's peaceful and quiet, so I head to the library every day.

此句中 'library' 指代单数，符合语境，无需改动。此处主要是标点符号的调整，非语法错误。

× I plan to work in Shanghai, my hometown, in the future and I choose a job which connected to my major nowadays, which is umm mechanic umm.

✓ I plan to work in Shanghai, my hometown, in the future and I choose a job which is connected to my major nowadays, which is umm mechanic umm.

此句中 'job which connected to my major' 缺少系动词 'is'，导致语法不完整。应为 'job which is connected to my major'。

× my major is about artificial manufacturing.

✓ my major is in artificial manufacturing.

动词 'is about' 用于表示主题时不太合适，专业通常用介词 'in' 表示所属领域，故改为 'my major is in artificial manufacturing'。

× my daily life is about learning and head to the library, that's all.

✓ my daily life is about learning and heading to the library, that's all.

'head to the library' 作为并列部分，应使用动名词形式 'heading'，保持结构一致。

× I choose a job which connected to my major nowadays

✓ I choose a job which is connected to my major nowadays

缺少系动词 'is'，导致句子结构不完整，应补充 'is'。

× I choose a job which connected to my major nowadays

✓ I choose a job which is connected to my major nowadays

此处描述现在的状态，需用现在时态 'is connected'，而非过去式 'connected'。

× It is a super hectic schedule of my major and I feel exhausted everyday.

✓ The schedule of my major is super hectic and I feel exhausted every day.

原句中 'It is a super hectic schedule of my major' 结构不自然，改为 'The schedule of my major is super hectic' 更符合英语表达习惯。

× It has a full of study atmosphere.

✓ It has a full study atmosphere.

'full of' 后面应接名词，'a full of study atmosphere' 结构错误，应去掉 'of'。