Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构较为简单，且有语法错误，如“technique Financial Management”应为“Technical Financial Management”，“I really good at it”应为“I am really good at it”。建议加强语法准确性，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I am currently a student at East China University of Science and Technology, majoring in Technical Financial Management. I really enjoy my major and feel confident in my skills.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“attend some part time job”应为“do some part-time jobs”，“earn some salary for my life”表达不清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免重复。

例: I am not currently working full-time because I am a university student. However, I often do part-time jobs at the stores on my campus to support myself financially.

提案: 回答内容具体，但表达有些重复且语法不够准确，如“air condition”应为“air conditioning”，“about more than 10 hours”表达冗余。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，避免重复。

例: I don't think it's a good place to work because I have to stand at the cash register for over 10 hours. Moreover, the air conditioning is often either too cold or too hot, and the environment is quite noisy.

提案: 回答过于简短，缺乏支持细节。建议在回答时给出理由或具体描述，使回答更完整和有说服力。

例: No, I don't like the place where I work because it is uncomfortable and noisy, which makes it hard to concentrate.

提案: 回答表达不够连贯，语法错误较多，如“after I graduated”应为“after I graduate”，“a lot of famous big companies”表达重复。建议使用连接词，调整语序，使表达更自然。

例: After I graduate from university, I plan to continue my studies. Then, I hope to find a job in Beijing because many well-known companies are located there, and I would like to work for one of them.

× Now I'm a student, I'm studying East China University of Science and Technology and I major in technique Financial Management.

✓ Now I'm a student, I'm studying at East China University of Science and Technology and I major in Financial Management.

句中缺少介词'at'，表示在某个地点学习，属于介词使用错误。应在大学名称前加'at'。

× I love my major and I really good at it.

✓ I love my major and I am really good at it.

句中缺少系动词'am'，导致句子结构不完整。应补充动词'am'使句子完整。

× Actually I always attend some part time job to earn some salary for my life.

✓ Actually I always do some part-time jobs to earn some salary for my living.

动词'attend'用法错误，应该用'do'来表示做兼职工作；'part time job'应为复数形式'part-time jobs'；'for my life'表达不当，应为'for my living'或'for my livelihood'。

× I always work for the stores in my school.

✓ I always work at the stores in my school.

介词使用错误，'work for'通常表示为某人工作，'work at'表示在某地工作。此处应使用'at'。

× I have to stand in front of the cash table for about more than 10 hours, and the air condition is always too cold or too hot.

✓ I have to stand in front of the cash register for more than 10 hours, and the air conditioning is always too cold or too hot.

'cash table'用词不当，应为'cash register'；'about more than'重复，应只用'more than'；'air condition'应为'air conditioning'。

× No, I don't like the place where I work.

✓ No, I don't like the place where I work.

此句无语法错误，符合语法规范。

× Actually, I would like to study further after I graduated from the university and after that I would like to find a job in the capital of China, because a lot of famous big companies, I would like to be a part of them.

✓ Actually, I would like to study further after I graduate from the university and after that I would like to find a job in the capital of China, because there are a lot of famous big companies, and I would like to be a part of them.

'after I graduated'时态错误，应为一般现在时'after I graduate'表示将来时间；句中缺少连词'and'连接两个分句；'because a lot of famous big companies'缺少谓语，应补充'there are'。