Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp lại thông tin không cần thiết và hoàn thiện câu để tránh bị ngắt quãng. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn về trường học.

例: I am currently a student at Windsor Hill High School, which is located about 5 kilometers from my home. It is a well-regarded school with excellent facilities and a supportive learning environment.

提案: Bạn cần trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi và tránh lặp lại thông tin đã nói trước đó. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'Uh'.

例: I don't work currently because I am a student at UH University of High School, which is about 5 kilometers from my home.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngắt quãng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ ý kiến của mình.

例: Yes, it is a great place to work because it has many experienced teachers and excellent facilities that support both teaching and learning.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trở nên tự nhiên hơn. Bạn cũng nên sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I really like my school because it has many experienced and supportive teachers. Moreover, the modern classrooms and well-equipped library make it a great place to study and work.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn về kế hoạch tương lai và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về ngành học hoặc mục tiêu nghề nghiệp.

例: In the future, I plan to attend a university to study economics because I am interested in understanding how markets work and want to build a career in this field.

× This school is quite near my home, about 5 kilometers and this is a very well school with good.

✓ This school is quite near my home, about 5 kilometers away, and it is a very good school.

The phrase 'quite near' should be followed by 'away' to indicate distance. 'Very well school' is incorrect; 'well' is an adverb and cannot modify 'school' (a noun). The correct adjective is 'good'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by connecting the two parts properly.

× I study at UH University of High School, which is located from about 5 kilometers from my home. Uh.

✓ I study at UH University of High School, which is located about 5 kilometers from my home.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used twice. The correct phrase is 'located about 5 kilometers from my home' without the first 'from'.

× Yes, totally. This school is uh, which when I study in red 9. There are many good teachers and good facilities.

✓ Yes, totally. This school is where I study in grade 9. There are many good teachers and good facilities.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'This school is uh, which when I study in red 9' is ungrammatical. It should be rephrased to 'This school is where I study in grade 9' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Yes, I really like my school because there are many experienced teachers who are very supportive and the facility such as modern classroom and well equipped library make it a great to work.

✓ Yes, I really like my school because there are many experienced teachers who are very supportive, and the facilities such as modern classrooms and a well-equipped library make it a great place to work.

'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' when referring to multiple items. 'Classroom' should be plural 'classrooms'. 'Well equipped' should be hyphenated as 'well-equipped' when used as an adjective. Also, 'make it a great to work' is incomplete; it should be 'make it a great place to work'.

× In the future, I want to study at any university. It is a good place for study about subjects related to economic. And so I think it's very nice.

✓ In the future, I want to study at a university. It is a good place to study subjects related to economics. So, I think it's very nice.

'At any university' is too vague; 'at a university' is more appropriate. 'For study about subjects' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to study subjects'. 'Economic' should be 'economics' as the subject name. 'And so' is better as 'So' to start the sentence.