Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Afghanistan), try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, use correct grammar such as 'someone learns something' instead of 'someone learn something'. Keep your answer concise and clear, avoiding repetition.

例: Currently, I am a student, but I plan to become a teacher to help students learn and achieve their goals. I find motivation in knowing that I can share my knowledge and make a positive impact on others.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure. Instead of 'I mostly can teach', say 'I will mostly teach'. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating previous ideas. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Currently, I do not have a job, but I plan to become a teacher. I will mostly teach in schools or educational institutions.

提案: Focus on grammar accuracy and avoid repetition. For example, say 'everyone works hard' instead of 'everyone do hard work'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to make your answer coherent. Be specific about why it is a good place to work.

例: In my opinion, schools are the best places to work because I can share my knowledge and help students achieve their goals. Moreover, everyone works hard and learns new things, which creates a motivating environment.

提案: Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar, for example, 'help their professional and personal growth' instead of 'grows'. Avoid repeating 'I can help' multiple times. Use linking words like 'and' or 'which' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I would love working there because I can share my knowledge and help students improve themselves. It is rewarding to support their professional and personal growth as they achieve their goals.

提案: Reduce filler words and improve sentence flow. Use correct expressions like 'English is one of my favorite languages' and 'I am confident in it'. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I plan to become an English teacher because it is one of my favorite languages and I speak it fluently. I am confident in my skills and want to share my passion with my students.

× someone learn something

✓ someone learns something

The verb 'learn' should be in the third person singular present tense 'learns' to agree with the singular subject 'someone'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving the present tense form of the verb.

× I don't have any work

✓ I don't have any job

The word 'work' in this context is uncountable and does not fit well with 'any' when referring to a job position. Using 'job' is more appropriate to indicate employment. This is a singular/plural and countable/uncountable noun usage issue.

× I mostly can teach in the school or in educational institution

✓ I can mostly teach at school or in an educational institution

The preposition 'at' is used with 'school' to indicate location, and 'an' is needed before 'educational institution' as it is a singular countable noun. Also, the adverb 'mostly' is better placed after the modal verb 'can'. This is an issue with preposition and article usage and adverb placement.

× it is the best place to work in it

✓ it is the best place to work

The phrase 'in it' is redundant because 'to work' already implies the place. Removing 'in it' corrects the sentence. This is an incorrect pronoun usage issue.

× I help someone to achieve their goals

✓ I help someone to achieve his or her goals

The pronoun 'someone' is singular, so the possessive pronoun should be singular as well ('his or her') instead of plural 'their'. This is a singular/plural pronoun agreement issue.

× everyone do hard work

✓ everyone does hard work

The subject 'everyone' is singular and requires the verb 'does' in third person singular form. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving pronouns.

× Everyone is hard work

✓ Everyone works hard

The phrase 'Everyone is hard work' is incorrect. The intended meaning is that everyone works hard, so the verb form should be 'works hard'. This is a subject-verb agreement and incorrect pronoun usage issue.

× help students to learn something

✓ help students learn something

The verb 'help' is followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Therefore, 'to' should be omitted. This is an incorrect preposition usage issue.

× help their professional and personal grows

✓ help their professional and personal growth

The word 'grows' is incorrect here; the noun 'growth' should be used to refer to development. This is an incorrect use of nouns/pronouns issue.

× I want to share it with my students to, and I want to share my passion with them

✓ I want to share it with my students, and I want to share my passion with them

The comma after 'to' is misplaced and unnecessary. Removing it corrects the sentence. This is an incorrect punctuation and conjunction usage issue.