Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more grammatically correct and natural. Use present simple tense properly and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I am a student, but sometimes I look for part-time work because it helps me live without stress.'

例: I am a student, but sometimes I look for part-time work because it helps me live without stress.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear ideas. Avoid saying 'most dangerous work' if it is not true. Also, use correct expressions like 'it pays me a high salary.'

例: Currently, I work for a computer company. Although the job can be challenging, it pays me a high salary every month.

提案: Try to use more formal and precise language. Instead of 'cool place,' say 'a good place to work.' Also, avoid repeating the same idea. Add linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Absolutely, it is a good place to work because more than 1000 employees work here comfortably, and I believe it is one of the best workplaces.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use correct prepositions and tenses. For example, say 'I like working here because I have six months of experience. In two months, I will be promoted to senior operator.'

例: Yes, I like working here because I have six months of experience. In two months, I will be promoted to senior operator.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Use simple and clear sentences. For example, say 'My future plan is to own a computer company. I am gaining knowledge from my current job to achieve this goal.'

例: My future plan is to own a computer company. I am gaining knowledge from my current job to achieve this goal.

× Basically I am a student but sometime I searching for part time work because it's helped me to live without tension.

✓ Basically I am a student but sometimes I search for part time work because it helps me to live without tension.

The verb 'searching' is incorrectly used in present continuous form here; it should be simple present 'search' to match the habitual action. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'It's helped' should be 'it helps' to maintain present tense consistency.

× Well, currently I work for a computer company.

✓ Well, currently I work at a computer company.

The preposition 'for' is less appropriate here; 'work at' is commonly used to indicate the place of employment.

× Uh, I think this is the most dangerous work in the world, but it demands me huge salary after a month.

✓ Uh, I think this is the most dangerous work in the world, but it pays me a huge salary every month.

The verb 'demands' is incorrectly used with 'me'; 'pays me' is correct for salary. Also, 'after a month' should be 'every month' to indicate regular payment.

× Absolutely, this is a cool place for work.

✓ Absolutely, this is a cool place to work.

The phrase 'place for work' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'place to work'.

× At least 1000 people work here comfortably.

✓ At least 1000 people work here comfortably.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Yes, I'm I like to work this place because I have 6 month work experience.

✓ Yes, I like to work at this place because I have 6 months' work experience.

'I'm I' is incorrect; it should be 'I'. 'Work this place' should be 'work at this place'. '6 month' should be '6 months'' to show possession.

× After two months later I will be a senior operator at this place.

✓ In two months, I will be a senior operator at this place.

'After two months later' is redundant; use 'In two months' to indicate future time.

× Well question my future work plan is a holding a computer company because I am trying to gain some knowledge from this company and my plan is to be a computer owner for a country.

✓ Well, my future work plan is to own a computer company because I am trying to gain some knowledge from this company, and my plan is to be a computer owner in the country.

The sentence structure is incorrect and confusing. 'Question' is unnecessary. 'Is a holding a computer company' should be 'is to own a computer company'. 'For a country' should be 'in the country'.