Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免多余词汇，并注意语法正确性。

例: I work as a dance teacher and have been doing this job for 10 years. I really enjoy it.

提案: 回答中语法错误明显，句子结构不完整。建议直接回答问题，使用正确时态和完整句子。

例: I work at a dance school called Red Dancing, and I have been working there for 10 years.

提案: 回答不完整且重复，表达不清晰。建议使用连词组织句子，提供具体细节，并避免重复。

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the school is beautiful and spacious. Also, there is a coffee corner which is my favorite spot.

提案: 回答重复且不完整，语法错误较多。建议简洁表达观点，使用连词连接理由，并补充完整内容。

例: Yes, I like my workplace because it is beautiful and spacious. Additionally, the coffee corner is my favorite place there.

提案: 表达不够流畅，时态使用不当，数字表达不准确。建议使用正确时态，清晰表达计划，并准确描述数字。

例: In the future, I would like to open a new dance school. Currently, we have three schools with over 1,000 students studying dance.

× I work as a dancing teacher and I am in.

✓ I work as a dance teacher and I am in.

这里“dancing teacher”应改为“dance teacher”，因为“dance”作为名词用作职业名称时不需要加-ing形式。

× I very like my job.

✓ I like my job very much.

“very”不能直接修饰动词“like”，应使用“like ... very much”结构表达“非常喜欢”。

× I work in a dancing school and called Red Dancing and I had worked there for 10 years.

✓ I work in a dancing school called Red Dancing and I have worked there for 10 years.

“called Red Dancing”是对“a dancing school”的定语，不能用“and”连接；“had worked”时态不正确，应使用现在完成时“have worked”表示从过去持续到现在的动作。

× Yes, I think it is a good place to work and firstly my dancing school is very beautiful and spacious and and there is also a coffee corner and it it is my favorite and place in my school and the secondly my.

✓ Yes, I think it is a good place to work. Firstly, my dancing school is very beautiful and spacious, and there is also a coffee corner which is my favorite place in the school.

句子中“and”重复且使用混乱，应分句表达；“firstly”和“secondly”应正确使用，且句子应完整。

× Yes, I very like the place I work. Firstly my workplace is very beautiful and spacious and and there is A and also a coffee corner and it is my favorite place in my workplace and the secondly, my.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work very much. Firstly, my workplace is very beautiful and spacious, and there is also a coffee corner which is my favorite place.

“very like”错误，应为“like ... very much”；“and and there is A and also”结构混乱，应简化；“the secondly, my”不完整，应删除或补充完整。

× I would like to open a new dancing school in the future and nowadays we had three schools and with over them one 1000 students studying dancing here.

✓ I would like to open a new dancing school in the future. Nowadays, we have three schools with over 1,000 students studying dance here.

“had”时态错误，应为现在时“have”；“one 1000”应为“1,000”；“studying dancing”应改为“studying dance”，因为“dance”作为名词更合适。