Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. "I am student right now" yerine "I am a student right now" demek daha doğru olur. Ayrıca, gelecekteki planlarınızı belirtirken daha spesifik ve net ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

例: I am currently a student, but I plan to start working in a professional environment after I graduate.

提案: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları var, "I am a students" yerine "I am a student" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, "I don't work today" ifadesi yerine "I don't work currently" veya "I am not working at the moment" daha doğal olur. İş yeri hakkında daha fazla detay vermeniz faydalı olur.

例: I am not working at the moment because I am still a student, but I would like to work at UMM in the future because it is a reputable company.

提案: Cümleniz çok dolambaçlı ve tekrarlar içeriyor. Daha akıcı ve net ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, "flawless" kelimesi iş yeri için uygun olmayabilir. Daha uygun sıfatlar kullanarak açıklama yapmalısınız.

例: Actually, this company is very well known and has a great reputation compared to other companies.

提案: Cümleniz çok karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor. Daha basit ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, soruya doğrudan cevap verip, nedenlerini açıklamalısınız.

例: I have never worked in a workplace before, but I like my school because I am a student and I know it well.

提案: Cümlenizde çok fazla duraklama ve tekrar var. Daha akıcı ve net ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, "lovely rated" ifadesi yanlış, "highly rated" daha uygun olur. Gelecek planlarınızı daha spesifik anlatmalısınız.

例: My future work plan is to join the company I have dreamed of since childhood. It is a highly rated company and fits well with my field of study.

× I am student right now.

✓ I am a student right now.

The noun 'student' is singular and countable, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× I believe in the future I will work in the workplace.

✓ I believe that in the future I will work in a workplace.

Adding 'that' improves sentence clarity. Also, 'a workplace' is more natural than 'the workplace' when speaking generally about future work.

× I don't work today because I am a students but I would like to work in UMM.

✓ I don't work today because I am a student but I would like to work at UMM.

The noun 'student' should be singular here. Also, the preposition 'at' is more appropriate for institutions like UMM.

× I don't work today because I am a students but I would like to work in UMM.

✓ I don't work today because I am a student but I would like to work at UMM.

The preposition 'at' is used to indicate working at a specific place or institution, whereas 'in' is less common in this context.

× Actually, this company is so well known, so, uh, it might be so, uh, flawless compared to the other uh, company.

✓ Actually, this company is so well known, so it might be flawless compared to the other companies.

The phrase 'the other company' should be plural 'companies' to indicate comparison with multiple companies.

× Yes, I I actually these days I not I, I have never work worked in a workplace, but I love my schools because I am a students so I know more about my schools.

✓ Yes, actually these days I have never worked in a workplace, but I love my school because I am a student so I know more about my school.

'Schools' should be singular 'school' when referring to one's own educational institution. Also, 'student' should be singular. The verb 'worked' is the correct past participle form.

× Yes, I I actually these days I not I, I have never work worked in a workplace, but I love my schools because I am a students so I know more about my schools.

✓ Yes, actually these days I have never worked in a workplace, but I love my school because I am a student so I know more about my school.

The correct past participle form 'worked' should be used with 'have never' to form the present perfect tense.

× Umm, my future work plans is, uh, is to enter, umm, uh, the company that I dream in my childhood.

✓ Umm, my future work plans are to enter the company that I dreamed of in my childhood.

'Plans' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also, 'dreamed of' is the correct past tense and prepositional phrase.

× Umm, my future work plans is, uh, is to enter, umm, uh, the company that I dream in my childhood.

✓ Umm, my future work plans are to enter the company that I dreamed of in my childhood.

The verb 'dream' should be in the past tense 'dreamed' to refer to a past action.

× This company is, uh, is more lovely rated, uh, company, and this is so compatible with my department.

✓ This company is a highly rated company, and it is very compatible with my department.

'More lovely rated' is incorrect; 'highly rated' is the correct adjective phrase. Also, 'so compatible' should be 'very compatible' for natural expression.