Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, followed by concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity for better communication.

例: I graduated with a bachelor's degree three years ago, and now I work as an administrative director and legal affairs director. I hold a license to practice in my field, and I enjoy my job because it helps me grow professionally and assist others when needed.

提案: Your answer gives basic information but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your workplace. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will improve your answer's effectiveness.

例: I work in Riyadh, the capital city of Saudi Arabia, at a company called Flying's Company. It was established in 2021 and has been growing steadily since then. I have gained valuable experience working there so far.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to express your opinion directly and support it with clear reasons. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I don't think it's the best place to work long-term because the company is quite small and was only established in 2021. Therefore, I plan to stay for about three years to gain experience before moving to a larger company for new opportunities.

提案: Your answer shows your feelings but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to explain your reasons. Avoid unnecessary repetition and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, I like my current workplace, but I am considering moving to another country and company to gain more diverse and valuable experience. This will help me grow professionally and build my confidence.

提案: Your answer communicates your future plans but lacks clarity and contains incomplete sentences. Try to organise your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and provide specific details about your plans.

例: I am planning to establish my own company in the future because I want to help people. Since I have the necessary qualifications and experience, I aim to support clients involved in labour and civil court cases by providing legal assistance whenever they need it.

× Actually, I finished my my bicularist degree three years ago and then now I'm working as a administrative director and director of legal affairs and I have my my license to practice my major and I like my work until now.

✓ Actually, I finished my bicularist degree three years ago and now I'm working as an administrative director and director of legal affairs. I have my license to practice my major and I have liked my work until now.

The phrase 'a administrative director' is incorrect because 'administrative' starts with a vowel sound, so the article should be 'an' not 'a'. Also, 'I like my work until now' is incorrect because 'until now' implies a past action continuing to the present, so the present perfect tense 'I have liked' is appropriate.

× It's grow me up and I have a good experience and I can help the people if they need my assist.

✓ It has helped me grow and I have good experience and I can help people if they need my assistance.

'It's grow me up' is incorrect; the correct form is 'It has helped me grow' using present perfect tense and correct verb form. 'A good experience' should be 'good experience' as 'experience' is uncountable here. 'Assist' is a verb; the noun form 'assistance' is needed.

× I work in Saudi Arabia, specifically in capital city, real city.

✓ I work in Saudi Arabia, specifically in the capital city, Riyadh.

The phrase 'in capital city, real city' is incorrect. It should be 'in the capital city, Riyadh' with the definite article 'the' before 'capital city' and the correct city name.

× We call the company Flying's company and it's like it's established 2021 and it's grow up until now.

✓ We call the company Flying's Company and it was established in 2021 and has grown until now.

'It's established 2021' is incorrect; the past tense 'was established in 2021' is correct. 'It's grow up until now' should be 'has grown until now' using present perfect tense and correct verb form.

× I, I had I had many experience that side and I have good experience until now.

✓ I have had a lot of experience there and I have good experience until now.

'I had I had many experience' is incorrect and repetitive. The present perfect 'I have had' is appropriate to indicate experience up to now. 'Many experience' is incorrect; 'a lot of experience' or 'much experience' is correct.

× If I want to spend time at this company, I will stay like, uh, three years, then I will move, uh, to another company because I should have a different, uh, a different, uh, experience because the company, it's a small company.

✓ If I want to spend time at this company, I will stay for about three years, then I will move to another company because I should gain different experience since the company is small.

'I should have a different experience' is better expressed as 'I should gain different experience'. Also, 'stay like, uh, three years' should be 'stay for about three years'. The phrase 'because the company, it's a small company' is corrected to 'since the company is small' for clarity.

× It's established as I know 2021 then, uh, it's like in the beginning right now.

✓ It was established, as far as I know, in 2021 and it is still in the beginning stage now.

The phrase 'It's established as I know 2021' is incorrect; the correct form is 'It was established, as far as I know, in 2021'. Also, 'it's like in the beginning right now' is better expressed as 'it is still in the beginning stage now'.

× Yes, until now I like the place, but I'm thinking now to move to another country, another company, Sorry, because I should do have a wonderful experience and grateful and confident and confidence also city because I want to grow up my my experience.

✓ Yes, until now I like the place, but I am thinking of moving to another country and another company because I should have wonderful experiences and be grateful and confident as I want to grow my experience.

'I'm thinking now to move' should be 'I am thinking of moving'. 'I should do have' is incorrect; it should be 'I should have'. The phrase 'grateful and confident and confidence also city' is unclear; corrected to 'be grateful and confident'. 'Grow up my my experience' is corrected to 'grow my experience'.

× Actually, until now I'm deciding to establish my own company because I want to help people.

✓ Actually, I am currently deciding to establish my own company because I want to help people.

'Until now I'm deciding' is awkward; 'I am currently deciding' is clearer and fits the present continuous tense for ongoing decision.

× I have my alliances to practice a lot and there is a lot of people have like labor court, our climbing court.

✓ I have my licenses to practice a lot and there are a lot of people who have cases in the labor court and the criminal court.

'My alliances' is incorrect; the correct word is 'licenses'. 'There is a lot of people have' is incorrect; it should be 'there are a lot of people who have'. 'Our climbing court' is likely a mishearing or mispronunciation of 'criminal court'.

× I want to support them and help them and save them anytime and make my.

✓ I want to support and help them anytime and make my contribution.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Save them anytime and make my' is unclear. Corrected to 'support and help them anytime and make my contribution' for clarity and completeness.