Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "I work as a chef at a restaurant on the waterfront in Hobart City."

例: I work as a chef at a restaurant on the waterfront in Hobart City.

提案: Be careful with place names and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, provide more specific details about your workplace.

例: I work at Mirza Paddock, which is located in Hobart City. It gets very busy during the summer, but it's much quieter in winter.

提案: Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'however' correctly and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: There are both good and bad aspects of working there; however, I am currently enjoying my job.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to compare your current and previous workplaces and express your feelings more naturally.

例: To be honest, I preferred my previous work environment, but I am still enjoying my current job and always try to do my best.

提案: Provide a clearer and more confident response. You can add reasons or hopes to enrich your answer and use linking words for coherence.

例: I haven't decided my future plans yet, but I hope to continue working as a chef because I enjoy it.

× I work at the restaurant, which is in the waterfront of Hobart City.

✓ I work at the restaurant, which is on the waterfront of Hobart City.

The correct preposition to use with 'waterfront' is 'on' rather than 'in' because 'waterfront' refers to the land along the edge of a body of water.

× I'm working as a chef at over there.

✓ I'm working as a chef over there.

The preposition 'at' is unnecessary before 'over there'. 'Over there' already indicates location, so 'at' should be omitted.

× I work at the Mirza Paddock. It is in the Hubbard City.

✓ I work at Mirza Paddock. It is in Hobart City.

The article 'the' is not needed before 'Mirza Paddock' if it is a proper noun for a place. Also, 'Hubbard City' seems to be a typo; it should be 'Hobart City'.

× During summertime it gets very busy, but winter time not so much.

✓ During summertime, it gets very busy, but in wintertime, not so much.

The sentence lacks the preposition 'in' before 'wintertime' and needs commas for clarity. Also, 'winter time' should be one word 'wintertime'.

× I would say there are both parts, good points and bad point, but however I am enjoying currently working over there.

✓ I would say there are both good points and bad points, but I am currently enjoying working over there.

The phrase 'both parts' is vague; 'both good points and bad points' is clearer. Also, 'bad point' should be plural 'bad points' to match 'good points'. The word 'however' is redundant here and should be removed. The adverb 'currently' should be placed before 'enjoying'.

× To be honest I I like the the previous work work environment rather than current one.

✓ To be honest, I like the previous work environment rather than the current one.

There are repeated words 'I I' and 'the the' and 'work work' which are errors. Also, 'current one' needs the article 'the' before it for clarity.

× But yes I'm enjoying. Try to enjoy and try to do my best every time.

✓ But yes, I'm enjoying it. I try to enjoy and do my best every time.

The sentence 'I'm enjoying' is incomplete without an object. Adding 'it' completes the thought. The second sentence needs a subject 'I' to be grammatically correct.

× To be honest, I haven't decided yet, but I wish I could work as a chef like now.

✓ To be honest, I haven't decided yet, but I hope I can work as a chef like I do now.

The modal verb 'could' implies past ability or hypothetical situations. 'Hope I can' is more appropriate for expressing future desire. Also, 'like now' is unclear; 'like I do now' clarifies the meaning.