Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够流畅且有重复，句子结构混乱。建议简化表达，避免重复，并使用正确的时态。

例: I worked for two years after graduating from university, but I resigned to study English full-time.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议使用连贯的句子，明确职位和职责。

例: I work for a small bakery that specializes in cakes. I am in charge of human resources and help recruit new employees.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议使用更准确的词汇和连贯的句子。

例: Yes, I enjoy working there because the atmosphere is comfortable and my colleagues are very friendly. They support me when I face difficult situations.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的语法和更具体的细节。

例: Yes, I like my workplace because it offers many convenient facilities, such as a comfortable lounge, well-equipped cafeterias, and convenient transportation nearby.

提案: 回答不清晰且语法错误较多。建议明确表达未来计划，使用正确时态和句子结构。

例: Yes, I have future work plans. I want to complete my degree successfully, and after graduation, I will look for a suitable job.

× I have been a worker for two years since I I was graduated from the university and but I have been but I had resigned from the company in order to to get the full time study my English.

✓ I have been a worker for two years since I graduated from the university, but I have resigned from the company in order to study English full time.

这里的错误是动词时态使用不当。'was graduated' 应改为简单过去时 'graduated'，因为 'graduate' 是不及物动词，不用被动语态。'had resigned' 改为现在完成时 'have resigned' 更符合上下文时间关系。建议使用简单过去时描述过去事件，使用现在完成时描述与现在相关的动作。

× I work for a small business. I work for a small bakery MA bakery company that specializes in making cakes. My job is human resource and I help them to uh and I help them invite new employer.

✓ I work for a small business. I work for a small bakery company that specializes in making cakes. My job is in human resources, and I help them invite new employees.

'human resource' 应为复数形式 'human resources'，且前面应加介词 'in' 表示职位。'invite new employer' 中 'employer' 应为 'employee'，因为是指新员工。介词和名词的正确使用能使表达更准确。

× Yes, I think so, because the umm I very enjoy working in that company with the comfortable atmospheres and my colleague colleague all friendly with me. They help me a lot, especially when I face some difficult situation.

✓ Yes, I think so, because I really enjoy working in that company with a comfortable atmosphere, and my colleagues are all friendly with me. They help me a lot, especially when I face some difficult situations.

'very enjoy' 应改为副词 'really enjoy'，'atmospheres' 应为单数 'atmosphere'，'colleague colleague' 是重复，应为复数 'colleagues'，'all friendly with me' 应改为 'are all friendly with me'，'difficult situation' 应为复数 'difficult situations'。形容词、副词和名词的正确形式及句子结构能提高表达的准确性。

× Yes, I like the place where I work because my company provide many convenient facility for employees. For example there is a comfortable lounge and well equipment cafeterias and also there's a sur their surrounding convenient transport transport.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because my company provides many convenient facilities for employees. For example, there is a comfortable lounge, well-equipped cafeterias, and also convenient surrounding transport.

'provide' 应为第三人称单数 'provides'，'many convenient facility' 中 'facility' 应为复数 'facilities'，'well equipment cafeterias' 应为形容词形式 'well-equipped cafeterias'，'sur their surrounding convenient transport transport' 语序混乱，应改为 'convenient surrounding transport'。量词和形容词的正确使用使句子更通顺。

× No, I do have the future work plans because I want to get the degree frequently and successfully, and then after I graduated from the university, I will make the future workplace.

✓ Yes, I do have future work plans because I want to get my degree successfully, and after I graduate from the university, I will find a future workplace.

'No' 与后文内容矛盾，应改为 'Yes'。'frequently' 用法不当，应去掉。'after I graduated' 应用一般现在时 'after I graduate' 表示将来时间。'make the future workplace' 不合适，应改为 'find a future workplace'。情态动词和时态的正确使用能使表达更准确。