Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りを減らし、より自然で明確な表現を使うことが重要です。例えば、「I was a student, but I graduated in March. Now, I work part-time at a coffee shop.」のように、文を分けて簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I was a student, but I graduated in March. Now, I work part-time at a coffee shop.

提案: 答えは簡潔で良いですが、より自然な表現にするために「I work near Yokohama Station.」のように現在形を使い、場所の説明を少し詳しくすると良いでしょう。

例: I work near Yokohama Station, which is a busy area with many shops and restaurants.

提案: 「job friend」という表現は不自然なので、「colleagues」や「coworkers」を使いましょう。また、理由をつなげるために接続詞を使うと良いです。

例: Yes, I think so because the place is very clean and my coworkers are kind and friendly.

提案: 答えが短すぎて会話が広がりません。理由や感想を付け加えて、より詳しく答えましょう。

例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it has a friendly atmosphere and is conveniently located.

提案: 文法の誤りを直し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、具体的な理由や計画を加えると良いです。

例: I haven't decided yet, but in the future, I would like to work at a café like Starbucks because I enjoy interacting with customers.

× I missed student actually I graduated in March so now I'm working at coffee part time job.

✓ I was a student, actually. I graduated in March, so now I'm working at a coffee shop part-time job.

The phrase 'I missed student' is incorrect; it should be 'I was a student' to indicate past status. Also, 'coffee part time job' lacks an article and a noun; it should be 'a coffee shop part-time job.' This corrects singular/plural and article usage.

× I'm working nearby Yokohama station.

✓ I'm working near Yokohama station.

The preposition 'nearby' is an adjective or adverb, but here a preposition is needed. 'Near' is the correct preposition to indicate location.

× The place is so clean and my job friend is so kind and friendly.

✓ The place is very clean and my coworkers are very kind and friendly.

'My job friend' is unnatural and singular; 'coworkers' or 'colleagues' is more appropriate and plural. Also, 'so' can be replaced with 'very' for better formality.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

'Would you like' is used for preferences or offers, but here the question is about current feelings, so 'Do you like' is appropriate.

× Now I didn't decided yet but in the future I want to work to cafeteria like Starbucks.

✓ I haven't decided yet, but in the future I want to work at a cafeteria like Starbucks.

'Didn't decided' is incorrect; the present perfect 'haven't decided' is correct for an action not completed yet. Also, 'work to cafeteria' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'work at a cafeteria.'