Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. To improve, use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement, and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, say "I am currently working as a full-time lecturer and also work part-time as an occupational therapist. I enjoy both roles because they allow me to share knowledge and help people in different ways."

例: I am currently working as a full-time lecturer and also work part-time as an occupational therapist. I enjoy both roles because they allow me to share knowledge and help people in different ways.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, respond directly with clear information, use correct prepositions and articles, and avoid unnecessary filler words. For example, say "I work in Niger province, which is close to my house. It takes me about 30 minutes by bus, and the traffic is usually light, so it's easy to get there."

例: I work in Niger province, which is close to my house. It takes me about 30 minutes by bus, and the traffic is usually light, so it's easy to get there.

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. To improve, use correct verb tenses and articles, and provide more specific supporting details. For example, say "Yes, it is a good place to work because it offers opportunities and scholarships. Currently, I am planning to pursue a PhD program."

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it offers opportunities and scholarships. Currently, I am planning to pursue a PhD program.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to incorrect word choices and grammar. To improve, respond clearly with correct vocabulary and sentence structure. For example, say "Yes, I like the place where I work. It is well located and provides facilities such as a canteen, a staff resting room, and a gym."

例: Yes, I like the place where I work. It is well located and provides facilities such as a canteen, a staff resting room, and a gym.

提案: Your answer shows your intentions but has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. To improve, use correct verb forms and articles, and be more specific. For example, say "I am passionate about neuroscience, so I have decided to pursue a PhD in this field. I believe this knowledge will benefit many people in Thailand."

例: I am passionate about neuroscience, so I have decided to pursue a PhD in this field. I believe this knowledge will benefit many people in Thailand.

× I am currently working as a full time lecturers and I am also work part time as an occupational therapist.

✓ I am currently working as a full-time lecturer and I also work part-time as an occupational therapist.

The word 'lecturers' is plural but should be singular 'lecturer' to match the singular subject 'I'. Also, 'work' should be in the present tense form 'work' (not 'am work') and 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective.

× I enjoy both role because they allow me to share knowledge and help people in different way.

✓ I enjoy both roles because they allow me to share knowledge and help people in different ways.

The word 'role' should be plural 'roles' because it refers to two roles. Also, 'way' should be plural 'ways' to agree with 'different'.

× Mine's work is a Niger province but it's close to my house so I can take a bus for 30 minutes and it is easy to get there because there are no like an array traffic when I go to work.

✓ My work is in Niger province, but it's close to my house so I can take a bus for 30 minutes. It is easy to get there because there is no heavy traffic when I go to work.

The sentence has several structural issues: 'Mine's work' is incorrect; it should be 'My work'. 'a Niger province' should be 'in Niger province'. The sentence is too long and confusing, so it is better to split it. 'there are no like an array traffic' is incorrect; it should be 'there is no heavy traffic'.

× Yes, it is. This work is give me the opportunities and scholarships.

✓ Yes, it is. This work gives me opportunities and scholarships.

'This work is give' is incorrect; the verb should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'work'. Also, 'the opportunities' should be 'opportunities' without 'the' because it refers to opportunities in general.

× So now I have a plan to get the PhD program.

✓ So now I have a plan to enter the PhD program.

The phrase 'get the PhD program' is awkward; 'enter the PhD program' or 'enrol in the PhD program' is more appropriate. 'Get' is not the correct verb here.

× Yes I do. The past is locate well and the provider facility such as the canteen, the resting room for the staff and you can use the core.

✓ Yes, I do. The place is well located and provides facilities such as the canteen, the resting room for the staff, and you can use the gym.

'The past' should be 'The place'. 'is locate well' should be 'is well located'. 'the provider facility' should be 'provides facilities'. 'the core' is unclear; likely meant 'the gym' or 'the sports centre'.

× I passionate in neuroscience area so I decide to get the PhD in the neuroscience program and I think this knowledge will be benefit to every once in Thailand.

✓ I am passionate about the neuroscience area, so I have decided to pursue a PhD in the neuroscience program, and I think this knowledge will benefit everyone in Thailand.

'I passionate' needs the verb 'am' to form the adjective phrase. 'decide' should be past tense 'have decided' to indicate a decision made. 'get the PhD' is better as 'pursue a PhD'. 'will be benefit' should be 'will benefit'. 'every once' should be 'everyone'.