Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현을 개선하세요. 예를 들어, 'I'm not attending to university' 대신 'I'm not attending university this semester'라고 말하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

例: I'm a university student, but I'm not attending university this semester.

提案: 두 문장을 연결할 때 쉼표 대신 접속사를 사용하여 문장을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I don't work because I'm studying for the IELTS to improve my English.'

例: I don't work because I'm studying for the IELTS to improve my English.

提案: 문장 연결과 문법을 개선하세요. 'Because'로 시작하는 문장은 앞 문장과 자연스럽게 연결되어야 하며, 단수와 복수형을 정확히 사용하세요. 예를 들어, 'My home is located between two major universities in Seoul, so it is a very good environment for studying.'

例: My home is located between two major universities in Seoul, so it is a very good environment for studying.

提案: 'recent neighborhood' 대신 'current neighborhood'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 두 개로 나누어 명확하게 표현하세요.

例: Yes, I prefer my current neighborhood because my hometown is Busan. Now I live in Seoul, the capital city of Korea, so everything is different from my hometown.

提案: 'go off road'는 부적절한 표현입니다. 대신 'move abroad' 또는 'go overseas'를 사용하세요. 또한, 문장을 연결하여 더 자연스럽게 만드세요.

例: To be honest, I want to move abroad to get a job as a programmer, especially in London.

× I'm a university student but I'm currently I'm not attending to university in this semester.

✓ I'm a university student but currently I'm not attending university this semester.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used after 'attending'. The correct phrase is 'attending university' without 'to'. Also, 'in this semester' should be 'this semester' without 'in'.

× Because my home is located between two major university in Seoul, so it's very good environment to study a lot.

✓ Because my home is located between two major universities in Seoul, so it's a very good environment to study a lot.

The noun 'university' should be plural 'universities' because it refers to two. Also, 'good environment' needs the article 'a' before it.

× Because my home is located between two major university in Seoul, so it's very good environment to study a lot.

✓ Because my home is located between two major universities in Seoul, so it's a very good environment to study a lot.

The phrase 'very good environment' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'very good environment' to be grammatically correct.

× To be honest, I want to go off road to get a job as a programmer. Especially to London.

✓ To be honest, I want to go abroad to get a job as a programmer, especially in London.

The phrase 'go off road' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go abroad' meaning to go to another country. Also, 'Especially to London' should be 'especially in London' to indicate the location of the job.