Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and grammar by using correct job title and sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and ensure the answer is natural and concise. For example, clearly state your job role and what you do in simple, correct sentences.

例: I am currently working as an assistant at a math center. I enjoy this job because I help children and parents plan the right study schedules.

提案: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Provide specific details about the location and commute time.

例: I work at a math center that is quite close to my home. It takes me about 20 minutes to get there, so the location is very convenient.

提案: Use clear and correct grammar to express your ideas. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Explain why the place is good to work with specific examples and linking words.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because I can walk there easily. My colleagues are friendly and always help me when I have problems. Also, it gives me a chance to improve my skills.

提案: Clarify your answer and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases. Use linking words to explain reasons and provide specific details about what you enjoy at work.

例: Yes, I definitely like the place where I work because it helps me develop my skills. Also, it is a place where I can build strong connections with people.

提案: Express your future plans clearly and confidently. Avoid hesitation and filler words. Use correct grammar and provide a clear timeline and goal.

例: In the future, I want to improve my skills and after six months, I hope to be promoted to a manager position.

× I always with children and parents to advise the right schedule to do.

✓ I always work with children and parents to advise on the right schedule to follow.

The original sentence is missing the verb 'work' and the preposition 'on' after 'advise' is necessary to indicate the object of advice. Adding 'work' clarifies the action, and 'advise on' is the correct phrase.

× I work in a in a distance too.

✓ I work at a distance too.

The phrase 'in a in a distance' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition to indicate working remotely is 'at a distance'.

× It's quite near from my home.

✓ It's quite near my home.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary after 'near'. The correct phrase is 'near my home'.

× It turned a took me 20 minutes to to get there so it's very convenient location.

✓ It takes me 20 minutes to get there, so it's a very convenient location.

The phrase 'turned a took' is incorrect and confusing. The present tense 'takes' is appropriate here to indicate the usual duration. Also, 'a very convenient location' requires the article 'a' before 'very convenient location'.

× for me to walk to work is, uh, a friendly, uh, entitlement where Carlisle is always give me a hand, uh, when I have a trouble

✓ For me, walking to work is friendly, and my colleagues always give me a hand when I have trouble.

The phrase 'a friendly entitlement' is incorrect; 'friendly' should describe the experience, not 'entitlement'. 'Carlisle' seems to be a misused word; 'colleagues' or 'people' fits better. 'Is always give' should be 'always give' to match subject-verb agreement. 'A trouble' should be 'trouble' without article.

× it's a opportunity to me made a practice, uh, my skill.

✓ It's an opportunity for me to practice my skills.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. 'To me made a practice' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'for me to practice'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to match context.

× Yes, definitely. I really enjoy the the worst play, Yeah, because it's give me, uh, to uh, develop my skills.

✓ Yes, definitely. I really enjoy the work place because it gives me the chance to develop my skills.

'Worst play' is a mishearing or typo for 'work place'. 'It's give me' should be 'it gives me' to match subject-verb agreement. Added 'the chance' for clarity.

× Uh, is it a place where we connect with people strongly?

✓ It is a place where we connect strongly with people.

The question form is incorrect; the student is likely trying to say a statement. Also, 'connect strongly with people' is the correct word order.

× Yeah, in the future, I uh, want to be umm, uh, I, I want to measure uh, my skills and uh, and after, uh, six months I will be uh, umm, managers positions, uh.

✓ Yeah, in the future, I want to improve my skills, and after six months, I will be in a manager position.

'Measure my skills' is incorrect; 'improve my skills' fits better. 'Managers positions' should be singular 'manager position' with the preposition 'in'. The sentence is cleaned for clarity and correct future tense usage.