Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够流畅且语法错误较多，建议简洁明了地表达当前状态，避免重复和犹豫词汇。

例: I have graduated recently and am currently preparing applications for PhD positions, so I consider myself a student at the moment.

提案: 回答不清晰且语法混乱，建议直接回答没有工作经验，并表达未来工作意向，句子结构要完整。

例: I haven't worked yet, but if I find a job, I would like to work in Beijing because it offers many opportunities.

提案: 回答较好，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更连贯，同时丰富细节。

例: Yes, Beijing is a great place to work because it is a large city and the capital of China. Moreover, it offers many opportunities, and I can learn a lot by working with successful professionals.

提案: 回答内容混乱且不相关，建议直接表达对工作地点的喜好，并给出具体理由，避免无关内容。

例: Yes, I would like the place where I work. For example, I enjoy living in Bonn because it has a lively atmosphere, delicious food, and pleasant weather.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，建议条理清楚地说明未来计划，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: My future plan is to first pursue a PhD position in Germany. After completing it, I intend to find a job, possibly in a hospital or a biotechnology company, although I haven't made a final decision yet.

× And graduated, but I haven't worked uh, in this years.

✓ I graduated, but I haven't worked in these years.

这里的错误是时态和冠词使用不当。'And graduated'缺少主语，应为'I graduated'。'in this years'中'this'应改为'these'，因为years是复数。建议使用'I graduated, but I haven't worked in these years.'

× I'm prepared for a PhD position of locations application.

✓ I'm preparing an application for a PhD position in different locations.

'prepared for'用法不当，应该用进行时态'preparing'表示正在准备。'of locations application'结构不正确，应改为'for a PhD position in different locations'。建议改为'I am preparing an application for a PhD position in different locations.'

× So, uh, maybe I also add a student.

✓ So, uh, maybe I am also a student.

'add a student'表达不正确，应该用'be a student'表示身份。建议改为'Maybe I am also a student.'

× To be honest, I haven't worked, but if I want to find out where to work, I maybe if you want to go Beijing.

✓ To be honest, I haven't worked, but if I want to find out where to work, maybe I will go to Beijing.

句子结构混乱，'if you want to go Beijing'不合适，应改为'maybe I will go to Beijing'。'go Beijing'缺少介词'to'。建议改为'Maybe I will go to Beijing.'

× Beijing is a really big city and also as a capital for China and has lots of opportunities and I can work with many successful people to improve myself.

✓ Beijing is a really big city and also the capital of China. It has lots of opportunities, and I can work with many successful people to improve myself.

'as a capital for China'应改为'the capital of China'，因为中国只有一个首都，使用定冠词'the'。句子过长，建议拆分成两句。

× And living things and don't know, I really like Bonjour because there have happening, umm, good food and I really like it and the weather I also like.

✓ I live there and I really like Bonn because there are many events happening, good food, and I also like the weather.

句子结构混乱，'And living things and don't know'无意义，应改为'I live there'。'Bonjour'应为'Bonn'。'there have happening'应为'there are many events happening'。建议简化句子，表达清晰。

× But in my plans I first want to have a PhD position in Germany and after that I will come the trainer to find work and maybe in hospital or biologic company maybe haven't do the decisions.

✓ In my plans, I first want to have a PhD position in Germany, and after that, I will come to training to find work, maybe in a hospital or a biological company. I haven't made the decisions yet.

句子中时态和结构错误，'will come the trainer'应为'will come to training'。'maybe haven't do the decisions'应为'I haven't made the decisions yet'。建议调整句子结构，使表达更清晰。