Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda gereksiz dolgu kelimelerinden ("umm", "uh") kaçının ve cümlenizi daha akıcı ve doğal hale getirmek için daha net ve doğrudan ifadeler kullanın. Ayrıca, cümlenizi 2-3 cümle ile sınırlayarak daha etkili ve özlü cevaplar vermeye çalışın.

例: I have been working as a medical representative at a pharmaceutical company for two years since I graduated from university.

提案: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hatalarına dikkat edin ve daha doğal ifadeler kullanın. Örneğin, "for give information" yerine "to give information" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cevaplarınızı bağlayıcı ifadelerle daha akıcı hale getirin.

例: I work at a pharmaceutical company as a medical representative. Generally, I visit doctors and pharmacies to provide information about health products.

提案: Cümlenizdeki dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimlerine dikkat edin. "I'm interesting" yerine "I'm interested" kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrar ve dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının. Cümlenizi daha açık ve mantıklı bağlamlarla destekleyin.

例: Yes, definitely. Since I am a biomedical engineer, I am very interested in products and drugs, so this company is a good place for me to work.

提案: Cümle yapınızı geliştirin ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin. "if you want to happy" yerine "if you want to be happy" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanın.

例: Definitely yes, especially because of my manager and my team. I believe that liking the people you work with is very important to be happy at your workplace.

提案: "feature" kelimesi yerine "future" kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha net ve akıcı yapmak için bağlaçlar ve daha doğru kelimeler kullanın. Cümlenizi 2-3 cümle ile sınırlayın ve gereksiz tekrarları önleyin.

例: Actually, it's a difficult question because I'm not sure about my future. However, I want to improve my knowledge in health products and drug innovation, and maybe become a manager one day.

× I started, umm to work at this job.

✓ I started, umm working at this job.

The verb 'start' is followed by a verb in the -ing form, not the infinitive. Therefore, 'to work' should be corrected to 'working'.

× Generally, I visit my doctors and pharmacies for give information about health products.

✓ Generally, I visit my doctors and pharmacies to give information about health products.

The phrase 'for give' is incorrect. After 'for' a noun or gerund is expected, but here the infinitive 'to give' is appropriate to express purpose. So, 'for give' should be 'to give'.

× I'm interesting, umm, how to products and drugs, uh, from the my university, so it's a good place for me.

✓ I'm interested, umm, in how products and drugs, uh, from my university, so it's a good place for me.

The adjective 'interesting' describes something that causes interest, while 'interested' describes a feeling. The correct form is 'interested'. Also, 'how to products and drugs' is unclear and likely intended as 'in how products and drugs'. The article 'the' before 'my university' is incorrect and should be removed.

× I'm interesting, umm, how to products and drugs, uh, from the my university, so it's a good place for me.

✓ I'm interested, umm, in how products and drugs, uh, from my university, so it's a good place for me.

The preposition 'in' is needed after 'interested' to indicate the object of interest. Also, 'from the my university' is incorrect; 'the' should be omitted before possessive pronouns like 'my'.

× from the my university

✓ from my university

The definite article 'the' should not be used before possessive pronouns such as 'my'. The correct phrase is 'from my university'.

× I think you like other people such as manager or team.

✓ I think you like other people such as your manager or team.

Possessive pronouns are needed to specify whose manager or team is meant. 'Your' clarifies the relationship.

× I think it's so important if you want to happy in your work, workplace.

✓ I think it's so important if you want to be happy in your work, workplace.

The adjective 'happy' needs the verb 'to be' before it to form the correct predicate adjective phrase 'to be happy'.

× I think it's so important if you want to happy in your work, workplace.

✓ I think it's so important if you want to be happy at your work, workplace.

The preposition 'at' is more appropriate than 'in' when referring to 'work' or 'workplace' as a location.

× Actually, it's a difficult question for me because I'm not sure about my feature, but I want to improve myself above health production and drugs innovation and I want to be a manager maybe, and that's it.

✓ Actually, it's a difficult question for me because I'm not sure about my future, but I want to improve myself in health production and drug innovation and I want to be a manager maybe, and that's it.

The word 'feature' is incorrect; the correct word is 'future'. The preposition 'above' is incorrect here; 'in' is appropriate to indicate the field of improvement. Also, 'drugs innovation' should be 'drug innovation' as a compound noun.