Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use the present tense if you are currently working, and avoid repeating phrases like 'nearby near'. Also, make your sentences more concise and clear.

例: I work as a receptionist at a hotel near Tokyo Station, which is a great place because many customers come from different countries. This gives me plenty of opportunities to practice and improve my English through daily interactions.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question with clear sentences. Avoid repetition and provide specific details about your workplace location and environment.

例: I work near Tokyo Station, where many company headquarters are located. The area is busy in the mornings with many office workers commuting, but there are also plenty of restaurants where I enjoy my lunch breaks.

提案: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by correcting grammar and linking ideas more smoothly. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid repeating phrases like 'I think'.

例: Yes, it's a great place to work because my coworkers are friendly and supportive. Additionally, since the hotel is in Tokyo, I meet many foreign customers, which helps me practice English daily and improve my language skills.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I like working in Tokyo because it is a big city with many restaurants and shopping malls. During lunchtime, I enjoy trying different meals and often change my lunch options with my coworkers.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use correct verb tenses. Also, avoid vague phrases and explain your reasons more specifically.

例: I plan to work as a hotel receptionist in Canada because I have experience in this field. I find the job rewarding since I enjoy interacting with customers in English. Working in Canada will help me improve my English skills and gain international experience.

× I worked as a receptionist in a hotel nearby near the Tokyo station, which is really good place because there are many customers from other countries.

✓ I work as a receptionist in a hotel near Tokyo station, which is a really good place because there are many customers from other countries.

The question asks about current work status, so the present tense 'work' should be used instead of the past tense 'worked'. Also, 'nearby near' is redundant; 'near' is sufficient.

× which is really good place because there are many customers from other countries.

✓ which is a really good place because there are many customers from other countries.

The phrase 'really good place' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'really' to be grammatically correct.

× So I think it's really good place to learn English because there are many opportunities to practice my English to interact with.

✓ So I think it's a really good place to learn English because there are many opportunities to practice my English by interacting with others.

The phrase 'practice my English to interact with' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'by' to indicate the method of practicing, and the phrase should be completed with 'interacting with others' for clarity.

× I walked in nearby near Tokyo station and there are many companies headquarters, so many tour.

✓ I work near Tokyo station and there are many company headquarters, so many tourists.

The question is about current work location, so present tense 'work' is appropriate instead of past tense 'walked'. Also, 'nearby near' is redundant; 'near' suffices. 'Companies headquarters' should be 'company headquarters' and 'tour' should be 'tourists' for correct meaning.

× there are many companies headquarters, so many tour.

✓ there are many company headquarters, so many tourists.

'Companies headquarters' is incorrect; the correct form is 'company headquarters' as 'headquarters' is singular or plural but used with singular 'company'. 'Tour' should be plural 'tourists' to match the context.

× Many office walkers commute to my station, so it's quite crowded in the morning, in the morning.

✓ Many office workers commute to my station, so it's quite crowded in the morning.

'Office walkers' is incorrect; the correct term is 'office workers'. Also, the phrase 'in the morning' is repeated unnecessarily.

× But I think it's there are many restaurants so I can enjoy lunchtime.

✓ But I think there are many restaurants, so I can enjoy lunchtime.

The phrase 'it's there are' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'there are' to indicate existence.

× I think it's really a good place to work because my coworker is really friendly to me and supportive.

✓ I think it's really a good place to work because my coworkers are really friendly and supportive.

'Coworker' should be plural 'coworkers' to match the context of multiple colleagues. Also, 'friendly to me' is better expressed as 'friendly'.

× And also my hotel is located in Tokyo, so many foreign customers can visit my hotel.

✓ Also, my hotel is located in Tokyo, so many foreign customers visit my hotel.

The phrase 'can visit' implies possibility, but here the simple present 'visit' is more appropriate to indicate regular occurrence.

× So I think it's really a good place to learn about learning English.

✓ So I think it's really a good place to learn English.

The phrase 'learn about learning English' is redundant and awkward. The correct phrase is 'learn English'.

× I use English daily life to interact with customers.

✓ I use English in daily life to interact with customers.

The phrase 'English daily life' is incorrect. The preposition 'in' is needed to indicate the context 'in daily life'.

× I like the place where I work. I work because I work in Tokyo as I say, which is really a big city.

✓ I like the place where I work. I work in Tokyo, as I said, which is really a big city.

The phrase 'I work because I work in Tokyo as I say' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'I work in Tokyo, as I said' to indicate past reference.

× So there are many restaurants and shopping malls in there.

✓ So there are many restaurants and shopping malls there.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'there'.

× So when the lunchtime I can enjoy many of I can enjoy many options for lunchtime.

✓ So at lunchtime, I can enjoy many options for lunch.

The phrase is repetitive and awkward. 'At lunchtime' is the correct preposition, and 'many options for lunch' is clearer.

× So I change lunch daily with my coworker.

✓ So I change my lunch daily with my coworkers.

'Change lunch' is unclear; 'change my lunch' is better. Also, 'coworker' should be plural 'coworkers' to indicate multiple colleagues.

× I plan to work in Canada as a receptionist in the hotel because I worked in a lot.

✓ I plan to work in Canada as a receptionist in a hotel because I have worked a lot.

The phrase 'I worked in a lot' is incorrect. The present perfect 'have worked' is appropriate to indicate experience. Also, 'in the hotel' should be 'in a hotel' as it is not a specific hotel.

× I work in a hotel right now, so I want to use my experience to get a job in Canada, which is really rewarding job for me because I like to commit interacting with customers within English.

✓ I work in a hotel right now, so I want to use my experience to get a job in Canada, which is a really rewarding job for me because I like interacting with customers in English.

The phrase 'commit interacting' is incorrect; 'like interacting' is correct. Also, 'within English' should be 'in English'. The article 'a' is needed before 'really rewarding job'.

× So in Canada I can learn more English and also I want to.

✓ So in Canada, I can learn more English, and I also want to improve my skills.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'improve my skills' completes the thought and improves clarity.