Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误和重复表达，句子应更自然流畅。可以先直接回答职业，然后简要说明原因，避免冗长和语法错误。

例: I work as a dental technician because I enjoy helping elderly people solve their dental problems. It is a rewarding job that I find fulfilling.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复词汇，表达不清晰。应简洁明了地描述工作地点和环境，避免重复和不连贯。

例: I work in a dental laboratory, which is a comfortable and relaxing place. I enjoy working there because the atmosphere is pleasant.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不准确，句子结构混乱。应直接回答问题并用连贯的句子说明理由。

例: Yes, it is a good place to work. Every day when I go to the office, I feel positive energy that inspires my creativity.

提案: 回答不够清晰，存在重复和语法错误。应明确表达喜欢工作的原因，并使用恰当的词汇。

例: I really like my workplace because my boss teaches me valuable skills on how to create excellent dental prosthetics.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够连贯。应清晰表达未来计划，使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: In the future, I hope to work in a different country. I also want to become a teacher to share my knowledge and teach others how to make great dentures.

× I enjoy my job, it can let me enjoy all time.

✓ I enjoy my job because it allows me to enjoy my time.

原句中使用了逗号连接两个独立分句，造成句子结构错误。应使用连词如because连接，表达因果关系。建议避免逗号拼接独立句。

× Why I choose this job because it can help old people to solve their problems.

✓ I choose this job because it can help old people solve their problems.

原句中“Why I choose this job because”结构不正确，疑问词why不应出现在陈述句中。应直接陈述原因。

× I work in dental lab which it is comfortable and relax relax relax when we make the teas we can feel enjoy in the workplace.

✓ I work in a dental lab which is comfortable and relaxing. When we make the teeth, we can feel enjoyment in the workplace.

原句中“which it is”重复使用主语，且“relax relax relax”用词错误，应为形容词relaxing。动词“make the teas”应为“make the teeth”。

× Yes, it is a good place to walk when I go to office every day, I feel I have positive energy to creative all time.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work. When I go to the office every day, I feel I have positive energy to create all the time.

原句中“good place to walk”应为“good place to work”，动词“creative”应为动词原形“create”，且缺少冠词“the office”。

× I really like this this place when I walk every day because the boss can teach more information to know how to create a wonderful taste.

✓ I really like this place when I walk here every day because the boss can teach me more information on how to create wonderful teeth.

原句中“this this”重复，应去掉一个；“teach more information to know”表达不清，应改为“teach me more information on how to”；“wonderful taste”应为“wonderful teeth”符合语境。

× I want to work in different country if I have change I want to be a teacher to teach another dental technician lots of knowledge and how to create a great dentures.

✓ I want to work in a different country. If I have the chance, I want to be a teacher to teach other dental technicians lots of knowledge and how to create great dentures.

原句中“different country”缺少冠词“a”；“if I have change”应为“if I have the chance”；“another dental technician”应为复数“other dental technicians”；“a great dentures”中“dentures”是复数，前面不应加不定冠词“a”。