Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (current role), then give one or two specific supporting details (subjects taught, position). Avoid repetition and irrelevant closing phrases like “Yes, this is enough.”

例: I am a visiting faculty member at a government college and university. I teach social science subjects such as economics, civics and the history of Pakistan. I also supervise small research projects for undergraduate students.

提案: Give a direct, complete answer with clear phrasing and no filler. State the institution and department, then add one specific detail about the students or streams. Use one or two linking words for coherence and finish the thought—avoid trailing off.

例: I work at JCU Lahore in the intermediate (high school) department. The department offers several streams such as FSc Pre-Engineering and Pre-Medical, and I teach social science subjects like Pakistan Studies and civics to those students.

提案: Open with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons, using linking words (because, for example). Avoid repetition and polish grammar (singular/plural agreement). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, it is a great place to work because the campus is vibrant and there are many extracurricular activities. Moreover, faculty have good opportunities to conduct research with students, which helps professional development.

提案: Answer directly with present-tense preference and give specific examples of why you like it. Correct tense errors and improve cohesion with linking words (for example, because, which). Avoid long unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I really enjoy working there because GCU gave me a lot of exposure both as a student and as a teacher. For example, interacting with students from diverse backgrounds helps me learn new perspectives and exchange ideas.

提案: State future plans clearly and use accurate academic terms and tenses. Begin with a concise topic sentence about your immediate goal (applying for PhD/master’s). Then give specific supporting details (publications, research interests, intended field) and link them logically (because/so) to show purpose.

例: I am currently applying for PhD and master's programs to continue my studies in public administration and comparative politics. I have published two research papers in quantitative methods, and I am working on projects related to policymaking to strengthen my scholarship applications.

× I worked in government college, university.

✓ I work at Government College/University.

The student is describing current employment, so present tense 'work' is required rather than past tense 'worked'. Also use correct preposition 'at' for institutions and capitalize proper nouns. Suggestion: use present tense for current jobs: 'I work at...'.

× I'm related to field of academia or teaching.

✓ I'm related to the field of academia and teaching.

Missing article 'the' and wrong conjunction 'or' for two related areas; use 'the field of' plus 'and' to link both nouns. Also 'related to' is acceptable but clearer: 'I work in the field of academia and teaching.'

× I work as in visiting faculty in government college university.

✓ I work as a visiting faculty member at Government College/University.

Use article 'a' before a singular count noun 'visiting faculty member' and preposition 'at' for institutions. 'Visiting faculty' often needs 'member' or 'as a visiting lecturer'.

× I teach economics, civics, economics and history of Pakistan studies.

✓ I teach economics, civics, and Pakistan Studies history.

The sentence repeats 'economics' and misorders nouns. Use commas and 'and' correctly and standardize course name 'Pakistan Studies'. Avoid duplication.

× Yes, this is enough.

✓ Yes, that's enough.

More natural spoken response uses contraction 'that's' instead of 'this is' in this context. Not a grammar error but improves fluency.

× I said earlier, I work in JCU Lahore, the in their intermediate department, basically intermediate department is a high school department where students enroll in different stream FSCP, engineering, medical and particularly I teach students, uh, different, uh, social sciences subject like say weeks Pakistan studies and uh, also I.

✓ As I said earlier, I work at JCU Lahore in their intermediate department. The intermediate department is like a high school where students enroll in different streams such as FSc Pre-Engineering, Pre-Medical, and FSc Computer Science; I particularly teach social science subjects like Pakistan Studies and others.

Multiple issues: sentence run-on, article misuse ('the in their'), awkward phrasing and missing parallelism. Break into sentences, use 'at' for institution, include articles, and correct stream names and punctuation. Remove filler 'uh'.

× This is a very fantastic place to work because Government College has a very vibrant campus.

✓ This is a fantastic place to work because Government College has a very vibrant campus.

'Very fantastic' is redundant; 'fantastic' alone is sufficient. Also use article 'a' before 'Government College' if generic: 'a Government College'.

× There is a lot of opportunities for student and teachers in extracurricular activities and the research as well.

✓ There are a lot of opportunities for students and teachers in extracurricular activities and in research as well.

Subject-verb agreement: 'opportunities' plural requires 'are' not 'is'. Use plural 'students' and 'teachers'. Remove unnecessary definite article before 'research' and add preposition 'in'. },{