Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and use correct verb forms and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., your job title), then add one specific responsibility. Use simple linking words if needed. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: I work as a food service supervisor at a small motel called 121 Motel. I supervise the serving staff and make sure guests are satisfied with their meals.

提案: Give a clear location and a brief, specific description. Use correct articles and plural/singular forms, and avoid hesitation. Use one linking phrase to add a positive detail.

例: I work at the 121 Motel in Asanavoya Village, which is a small family-run motel in my town. The building is well-kept and the atmosphere is calm and welcoming.

提案: Answer directly then support with two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (place, work, atmosphere, staff) and avoid vague phrases like 'old stuff'.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the atmosphere is quiet and the staff are friendly. For example, my colleagues are supportive and managers treat everyone respectfully, so people enjoy working there.

提案: Provide a clear opinion sentence then give one or two concrete reasons. Use correct grammar for subject-verb agreement and avoid repeating phrases. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it is quiet and not stressful. I can focus on my tasks and interact calmly with customers, which makes my shifts enjoyable.

提案: State a specific goal and give one or two concrete steps or areas of interest. Reduce hesitation sounds and use appropriate verb forms (e.g., 'I want to work' or 'I plan to').

例: In the future I would like to work for a larger company in web development or game design. To achieve this, I plan to study programming courses and build a portfolio of projects to show potential employers.

× I am I am work in work in food serving supervisor in 121 motel and I care. I care of my customer and and what.

✓ I work as a food service supervisor at the 121 Motel, and I take care of my customers.

The student repeated 'I am' and used incorrect verb forms and pronouns. Use 'work as' to state a job role (verb + noun), 'food service supervisor' is the correct noun phrase, and 'at' is the correct preposition for a location. Use 'take care of' for responsibility and plural 'customers'. Remove repetition and redundant words. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I'm working in 1/21 to take house in Asanavoya village.

✓ I work at 1/21 Take House in Asanavoya Village.

Use 'work at' for a specific address or location. Capitalize proper names and use the correct word order for the place name. Also use simple present 'work' for habitual employment rather than continuous if describing a regular job. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× They this one this is a small motel in my town and there this model is very nice and the atmosphere are extremely good.

✓ It is a small motel in my town, and the motel is very nice; the atmosphere is extremely good.

The original sentence has extra demonstratives and incorrect clause order. Use 'it' to refer to the motel, avoid repeating 'this', and use singular 'motel' and singular verb 'is' with 'atmosphere'. Clean clause connectors and punctuation for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, this is good place to walk because on their atmosphere are quiet, indoor old stuff, behaviour are friendly, that's why everyone are working there and they are happily.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because the atmosphere is quiet, the interior is old-fashioned, and the staff are friendly; that's why everyone works there and they are happy.

Use the definite article 'a' before 'good place'. 'Work' not 'walk'. Use 'the atmosphere is' (singular) and 'interior' or 'inside' instead of 'indoor old stuff'. 'Staff' or 'behaviour' needed correction: use 'staff are friendly' or 'the staff is friendly'. Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone works' (singular verb) but can accept 'staff are'. Use 'happy' (adjective) rather than 'happily' (adverb). Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Would you like to place? Yes, I like this place there where I work because this place are quiet in the way in when I am working in this place I like because.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it is quiet and I enjoy working there.

The phrase 'Would you like to place?' is incorrect; the question asked was 'Would you like the place where you work?' The student's response should use 'the place where I work'. Use 'it is quiet' (singular) and a concise clause 'I enjoy working there'. Remove redundant phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× My future work plan is I'm working in uh, any big, uh, big company like uh, web developing or, uh, any gaming or, or designing.

✓ My future plan is to work for a big company in web development, gaming, or design.

To express future intention, use 'My future plan is to...' followed by the infinitive 'to work'. Use noun forms 'web development', 'gaming', and 'design' rather than gerunds or repeated 'big'. Remove filler words 'uh' and duplicate words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6