Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümle yapınızı ve kelime seçimlerinizi düzeltin. Doğru ifade "I’m a student but I don’t go to school or the library. I’m a distance/online student." olmalı. Kısa ve net bir konu cümlesi ile başlayın, sonra gerekirse kısa açıklama ekleyin. Telaffuz ve kelime seçimine dikkat edin (ör. "distance student", "don’t go to").

例: I’m a student, but I don’t attend a physical school or go to the library. I study through an online/distance program, which lets me learn from home.

提案: Basit gramer hatalarını düzeltin: doğru yapı "I don’t work, but I study at home" olmalı. Bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp nedenini bağlaçla açıklayın (e.g. "because" veya "so"). 5 cümleyi geçmemeye dikkat edin ve gereksiz tekrarları önleyin.

例: I don’t work at the moment; I study at home because it’s more comfortable and helps me concentrate better.

提案: Yanıtınız şu an anlaşılması zor ve karışık. Önce doğrudan cevap verin (evet/ hayır) ve sonra iki kısa neden verin. Dilbilgisi ve kelime sırasına dikkat edin ("I feel more confident studying from home"). Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın.

例: Yes, it’s a good place to work. I feel more confident and less distracted at home, so I can focus on my studies more effectively.

提案: Cümlenizi netleştirin: "I don’t want to work here; I would like to work in Italy." gibi. İsteğinizi açıklayan kısa bir sebep ekleyin. İngilizce dilbilgisine dikkat edin ("I would like to" veya "I want to").

例: No, I wouldn’t like to work here. I would like to work in Italy because I’m interested in the culture and there are good job opportunities in my field.

提案: Cevabınız karışık ve anlaşılmaz. Önce net bir konu cümlesi verin: gelecek planınız nedir? Ardından iki kısa destekleyici cümleyle nedenini açıklayın. Örneğin: "I plan to study business at university and then work in international trade." Kısa ve doğru kelimeler kullanın.

例: My plan is to study business at university and then work in international trade. I hope to graduate within four years and find a job in an international company where I can use my language skills.

× I'm a student but I don't into a school or library.

✓ I'm a student but I don't go to a school or library.

The verb 'go' is required with the preposition 'to' to indicate movement toward places. The original uses 'don't into' which is ungrammatical. Use 'don't go to' or 'I don't attend' depending on intended meaning.

× I'm a loan student.

✓ I'm a distance-learning student.

'Loan student' is incorrect word choice. Likely meaning is a student who studies remotely; use 'distance-learning student' or 'online student'. This fixes meaning rather than a strict grammatical inflection error.

× I don't work but I am study at home, it's more comfortable for me.

✓ I don't work but I study at home; it's more comfortable for me.

Use the simple present 'I study' rather than 'I am study' (which mixes present continuous form). Also replace comma splice with a semicolon or separate sentences. 'Study at home' correctly uses the preposition 'at' for location.

× Of course it is my meals. Uh, my meals. It's Tom at the moment. I find study from home more confidence.

✓ Of course, it's my meal time. Uh, my meal. It's 10 am at the moment. I find studying from home gives me more confidence.

Many issues: unclear pronoun use and incorrect nouns. 'Meals' should be 'meal time' or 'meal'; 'Tom' likely misheard for 'ten' or time—corrected to '10 am'. 'Study from home' should be 'studying from home' (gerund) and 'more confidence' needs verb 'gives' to form a complete clause. Use gerund after 'find' when describing an experience.

× I don't want it. I want to Italy to work.

✓ I don't want to stay here. I want to go to Italy to work.

The verb 'go' is needed with the preposition 'to' for destinations: 'go to Italy'. 'I don't want it' is vague; replacing with 'I don't want to stay here' fits context and corrects pronoun/preposition use.

× I hope I'm going to eat today for university I beat when I beat university.

✓ I hope I'm going to study at university when I finish school.

Original sentence is confusing with wrong verbs ('eat', 'beat'). Use 'study at university' for future education plans and 'when I finish school' to express completion of current studies. 'I'm going to' correctly marks future intention.

× I'm, uh, I went to business at Mysterio means it's my dream.

✓ I'm going to study business at a university called Mysterio; it is my dream.

'M went to' is past tense and doesn't fit future intention. Use 'I'm going to study' for planned action. Clarify 'Mysterio' as an institution name and use 'it is my dream' for statement of aspiration. Ensure verb tense matches intended meaning.