Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然且条理清晰。开头应直接回答问题，其次用一到两句话说明背景并给出原因，避免重复和语法错误。例如“I'm now a full-time mum”之后用一句话交代过去的职业和离职原因，注意时态一致和冠词用法。

例: I'm currently a full-time mum. I previously worked as a chief editor at a local news agency, but I quit last year to take care of my children and to have a longer career break.

提案: 回答要简洁且语法正确。直接说明工作单位及其位置，并用一两句补充信息（例如机构性质或规模）。避免重复和不完整的从句，注意动词时态和冠词。

例: I used to work for a local news agency called Oriental Daily, which is based in the Tai Po district of Hong Kong. It is one of the largest news organisations in the city.

提案: 需要更有逻辑的展开观点。先回答是否是好地方，然后给出一到两条具体理由并用连接词衔接。注意动词形式和复数/单数一致，避免口头语填充词如“umm”。

例: To be honest, it wasn't a great place to work because the workload was heavy and I often had to work during holidays. Since the media focuses on breaking news, we frequently had to rush stories at short notice.

提案: 问题询问的是你是否喜欢现在工作的地方。回答要明确立场并给出具体原因和例子。把句子组织好，减少重复，补全不完整的表达（例如“do a lot of housework”）。

例: Yes, I like working at home because it allows me to manage my family and housework more easily. Although I'm busy even after my children go to school, I appreciate the flexibility and comfort of being at home.

提案: 回答要直接说明计划并给出具体步骤或准备工作。避免发音或拼写错误（如"weapons"应为"plans"），并把语言表述完整（例如如何提升技能，哪类岗位）。使用连接词让回答更连贯。

例: I plan to look for a new job after a one-year career break, probably in public relations or marketing. To prepare, I will improve my language skills and writing by taking courses and doing freelance projects to build my portfolio.

× I'm now a full time mum at home.

✓ I'm now a full-time mum at home.

‘full time’ 应写作复合形容词 full-time，放在名词前需要连字符；此外句子语法正确但拼写与标点需注意。

× I was a chief editor in news agency before and I quit my job last year because I have to take care of my children and I want to have a long term break because I'm not I'm.

✓ I was a chief editor at a news agency before and I quit my job last year because I had to take care of my children and I wanted to take a long-term break.

问题包含多项：1) 使用介词 at a news agency（错误使用 in news agency）——属于介词用法（但按指示只改列在清单中的时态等，这里主要改为合适表达）。2) 时态不一致：叙述过去的事件应使用过去时（quit → quit 正确但后面因果说明用过去时 had to、wanted）。3) 'long-term' 作为形容词需连字符。将句子统一改为过去时态以保持时间一致性。建议：描述过去发生的动作和原因时，使用过去时态；复合形容词用连字符。

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where did you work?

原句末有多余符号并且面试者已说过去职业，应使用过去时 Where did you work?（这里属于句子结构与时态问题）。建议：根据上下文判断时态，提问过去职业用过去时。

× I worked in a local news agency called Oriental Daily. It located in Thai PO of Hong Kong.

✓ I worked at a local news agency called Oriental Daily. It was located in Tai Po of Hong Kong.

1) 工作地点常用 at a company/agency；2) 地名应为 Tai Po 而非 Thai PO；3) 描述过去位置需过去时 was located。建议：常用固定搭配 'work at'，地名拼写要准确，时态与上下文一致。

× It is It is at the biggest news agency in Hong Kong which.

✓ It was one of the biggest news agencies in Hong Kong.

原句重复‘It is It is’，结构不完整，且应使用过去时。修改为完整、通顺的表达。建议：避免重复片段，确保句子主谓完整。

× In fact, it is not a good place to work.

✓ In fact, it was not a good place to work.

根据上下文谈过去的工作经验，应使用过去时 was。建议：陈述过去经历时用过去时。

× Umm, I was very very busy in before and I have to work on holiday.

✓ I was very, very busy before and I had to work on holidays.

1) 删除多余介词 in；2) 因为描述过去情况，‘have to’ 改为过去时 'had to'；3) 'on holiday' 改为复数 'on holidays' 或 'on my holidays' 更自然。建议：注意不必要的介词，保持时态一致，复数/单数与习惯表达一致。

× And because of instant news is are very important for media nowadays, so we have to rush to report the news.

✓ Because instant news is very important for the media nowadays, we had to rush to report the news.

1) 原句有冗余连词 and/so，结构混乱；2) 'is are' 冲突，应为 'is'；3) 上下文为过去，改用 past 'had to'. 另外加上定冠词 'the media'。建议：保持单一连词、检查主谓一致并注意时态一致。

× Now I'm a full time mom and I work at home.

✓ Now I'm a full-time mum and I work at home.

同样需要连字符 full-time 且英式拼写 'mum' 保留。句子时态正确。建议：复合形容词用连字符。

× I like the pace I work now because it's my my home and I I'm quite busy.

✓ I like the pace I work at now because it's my home and I'm quite busy.

1) 删除重复单词 'my my' 和 'I I'm'；2) 在 'the pace I work at now' 添加介词 at，使结构自然。建议：写作/说话时注意避免重复并使用正确介词短语。

× Even my kids go to school. I have to do a lot of home.

✓ Even when my kids go to school, I have to do a lot of housework.

1) 将两个不完整句合并为条件状语从句 'Even when...'；2) 'do a lot of home' 是错误搭配，正确为 'do a lot of housework'。建议：学习常用搭配如 'do housework'，并用从句连接相关信息。

× My future weapons are finding a new job after one year career break, maybe public relations or marketing.

✓ My future plans are to find a new job after a one-year career break, maybe in public relations or marketing.

1) 'weapons' 显然拼写错误，应为 'plans'；2) 表示目标用不定式 'to find'；3) 'one year career break' 前加不定冠词和连字符 'a one-year career break'；4) 加介词 'in' 表示行业领域。建议：注意拼写，使用不定式表达计划，复合形容词用连字符。

× Like that I will improve my language and writing to fulfill.

✓ In that case, I will improve my language and writing skills to be more qualified.

原句 'Like that' 用法不当，改为 'In that case' 更自然；'writing' 后加 'skills'；动词 'fulfill' 用法不当，需更具体表达如 'be more qualified' 或 'meet job requirements'。建议：使用固定搭配并补全名词，避免单个不及物动词造成句意不明。