Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子有语法错误，表达不够自然。回答应直接开门见山，然后补充具体信息并使用连接词。请注意动词时态与短语搭配，例如用“I study in Paris”或“I am studying in Paris”。可把专业名更自然地表达为“Art Management and Design”。建议将回答控制在最多5句内，增加一点背景细节（如学校或年级）。

例: I am studying in Paris — I’m currently doing a master’s in Art Management and Design. I chose this program because I want to combine creative practice with cultural administration, and my courses include museum studies and design management.

提案: 回答冗长且有多处语法与词汇错误，且信息组织混乱。应先给出主题句（例如“I usually work as a design trainee during holidays”），然后用连接词补充细节，说明公司类型、具体任务和使用的软件。避免重复并完成句子结尾（如“to practice my skills”）。

例: I usually work as a design trainee during the summer and winter holidays at small design studios. There I do basic layout and 3D modelling tasks using software like Photoshop and SketchUp to practice my skills and build my portfolio.

提案: 回答表达热情但句子冗长且缺乏连贯性。建议先用一句总结（“Yes, it’s a great place to work.”），然后用连接词（because, and）补充两到三个具体理由，并尽量用更自然的词组（share their experiences, give guidance on marketing）。避免重复“tell me”。

例: Yes, it’s a great place to work because the staff are friendly and willing to share their professional experiences. They give me practical guidance on tasks and explain basic marketing strategies, which helps me improve quickly.

提案: 回答有意思但语法与逻辑不够准确。建议先用一句肯定回答，再用连接词（for example, which）具体说明学到的技能或经历，并用正确的时态与词汇（I gained real experience, it has determined me）。控制在两到三句内，更自然表达对未来职业的决定。

例: Yes, I really like where I work. For example, I gained practical experience in design projects and client communication, which has confirmed that I want to pursue a career in this field after graduation.

提案: 回答结构清晰但用词不够地道。建议先给出总体计划（short-term and long-term），然后用连接词（first, then, eventually）说明步骤，并使用更准确的表达（finish my master’s, start at a small firm, move to a larger company）。可以补充时间框架或具体目标。

例: My short-term plan is to finish my master’s degree and then work at a small design firm to build practical skills. Later I hope to move to a larger company to take on more complex projects and advance my career.

× I'm a student study in Paris now.

✓ I'm a student studying in Paris now.

句子缺少动名词形式来表示正在进行的动作。原句中“study”为动词原形，不能直接跟在名词“student”后作修饰，需用现在分词“studying”作为后置定语，表示“正在…学习”。建议把动词改为现在分词或重写为“I am a student and I am studying in Paris now.”

× My major is art management and design.

✓ My major is art management and design.

此句语法总体正确，但可根据语境在专业前加上冠词或连词以更自然，例如“My major is art management and design.” 已可接受；若想更明确可改为“My major is art management and design.”（保持原句）。

× In my summer holidays and winter holidays I usually work as a design trainee in some small companies and I will use some software I like and I familiar like Photoshop or SketchUp to do some basic things to practice my.

✓ During my summer and winter holidays I usually work as a design trainee in small companies, and I use software I am familiar with, like Photoshop or SketchUp, to do basic tasks to practise my skills.

原句存在多处结构问题：时间状语表达不自然，重复使用‘holidays’，动词时态和搭配错误（‘I will use’与习惯性动作不符，应用一般现在时；‘I familiar like’结构错误，应为‘I am familiar with’）；句尾‘to practice my’缺宾语。建议将时间状语改为During my summer and winter holidays，习惯性动作用一般现在时，使用正确短语‘be familiar with’，并补全宾语如‘skills’。

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Is it a good place to work?

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× Of course, yes, people there are very friendly and very enthusiastic to tell me some experiences in works and tell me what I need to do, tell me how the marketing is.

✓ Of course. People there are very friendly and enthusiastic; they tell me about their work experiences, what I need to do, and how marketing works.

原句中代词与从句连接不清，‘enthusiastic to tell me’搭配不当，应使用主语+动词结构；‘experiences in works’不地道，常用短语是‘work experiences’；‘tell me how the marketing is’表达不自然，应为‘how marketing works’或‘how the marketing department operates’。建议分句，用并列结构并改正搭配。

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

问题中使用‘Would you like’会询问愿望或偏好（未来或条件），但面试语境更自然用一般现在时询问常态喜好‘Do you like...’。因此将情态动词改为一般现在时以匹配语境。

× Yes, of course I like the place I work.

✓ Yes, of course I like the place where I work.

句子缺少联系词‘where’来引导定语从句修饰‘place’。建议在‘place’后加‘where’使表达完整自然。

× I learned a lot of things and get more real experiences about my major and determined me to work in this field in the future.

✓ I learned a lot and gained practical experience in my major, which has made me determined to work in this field in the future.

句中时态与动词形式混用：‘learned’（过去）后接现在时‘get’错误，且‘get more real experiences about my major’搭配不当，应使用‘gain practical experience in my major’；‘and determined me’缺少被动或从句连接，应改为‘which has made me determined’。建议统一时态并调整搭配和句子结构。

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× I will first finish my master class and go to a small company to learn some basic skills and then I will try to go to the big company to learn more things.

✓ I will first finish my master's degree and work at a small company to learn basic skills, and then I will try to join a big company to learn more.

原句中‘master class’用法不当，应为‘master's degree’；‘go to a small company’和‘go to the big company’表达笨拙，改为‘work at’或‘join’更自然；句中可省略重复的‘I will’或保留以保持清晰。建议用更地道的短语并修正名词所有格。