Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar and use a clear topic sentence. Say your status first, then briefly expand with specific, accurate details. Avoid tense and article errors (e.g., say “I major in Pharmacy” and “treatments for patients”). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking phrase if you add detail.

例: I'm a first-year student at Guangdong Medical University. I major in Pharmacy, which focuses on developing medicines and treatments for patients.

提案: Answer directly and naturally: correct the phrasing ('I don't work' not 'I'm not a worker') and avoid repetition. Provide one clear sentence about being a student and one brief, specific supporting detail using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I don't work; I'm a student at Guangdong Medical University. I study Pharmacy because I'm interested in how medicines are developed and used to treat illnesses.

提案: Clarify whether you mean 'study' or 'work' place. Use correct collocations: 'equipped with' and avoid tense errors. Give a concise reason with specific examples and use a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, it's a great place to study because the campus is equipped with a large library, a swimming pool and a modern gym, which make student life comfortable.

提案: Use precise vocabulary and correct articles ('an individual') and verbs. Be coherent: say you like the place and give 1–2 clear reasons connected with study activities. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I have mail prepare my assignment'.

例: Yes, I really like it. My study space feels private and comfortable; although it's small, I spend most of my time there because it's quiet and I can prepare my assignments without distractions.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about uncertainty, then add a specific, logically linked possibility. Correct grammar: 'I haven't thought about that yet' and 'many students who study Pharmacy choose to become doctors.' Provide a reason and if possible an alternative option.

例: I'm not sure yet; I haven't decided on my exact career path. I might become a doctor because many Pharmacy students pursue clinical work, but I am also considering working in pharmaceutical research.

× I'm a first year student studying in Guangdong Medical University and I majored in Pharmacy which is a science of developing and exploring the treatment for patient.

✓ I'm a first-year student studying at Guangdong Medical University and I major in Pharmacy, which is the science of developing and exploring treatments for patients.

Errors: incorrect tense 'majored' (past) should be present 'major' because the student is currently studying; missing hyphen in 'first-year'; wrong preposition 'in Guangdong Medical University' should be 'at'; article and number agreement: 'treatment for patient' should be 'treatments for patients' to indicate general meaning and plural. Suggestion: use present simple for current studies, use 'at' for institutions, hyphenate compound adjectives, and use plural for general nouns.

× I'm not a worker, I'm a student and I study in Guangdong Medical University.

✓ I'm not a worker; I'm a student and I study at Guangdong Medical University.

Error: incorrect preposition 'in' should be 'at' for institutions (classified under pronoun/preposition mix but fits preposition list). Also punctuation improved. Suggestion: use 'at' when referring to attending a university.

× My major is pharmacy, which is an interesting discipline for exploring the medicine.

✓ My major is Pharmacy, which is an interesting discipline for exploring medicine.

Error: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'medicine' when speaking generally. Suggestion: omit 'the' when referring to a field in general; capitalize 'Pharmacy' if treated as a proper department.

× Yes, I think it is really a good place because it equips with a beautiful library, big swimming pool and gym.

✓ Yes, I think it is really a good place because it has a beautiful library, a big swimming pool, and a gym.

Errors: wrong verb 'equips with' — use 'has'; missing articles 'a' before 'big swimming pool' and 'gym'; list punctuation. Suggestion: use 'has' to describe facilities and include indefinite articles for singular countable nouns.

× So the facility there was is overall.

✓ So the facilities there are good overall.

Errors: incorrect word order and verb form 'was is' and singular 'facility' vs intended plural; mismatch of verb 'are' with plural 'facilities'. Suggestion: choose correct verb and plural noun to match meaning and simplify phrase to 'are good overall'.

× Absolutely yes. I love the place I work in.

✓ Absolutely. I love the place where I work.

Errors: redundancy 'Absolutely yes' — 'Absolutely' alone is sufficient; 'place I work in' is informal; 'place where I work' is more formal. Suggestion: drop 'yes' and move preposition earlier for formal tone.

× It's just like a individual private space.

✓ It's just like an individual private space.

Error: incorrect article 'a' before a word starting with a vowel sound 'individual' — should be 'an'. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sounds.

× Although it's not very big, I spend most of my time there.

✓ Although it's not very big, I spend most of my time there.

No grammar change needed; sentence is correct. Suggestion: none.

× I have mail prepare my assignment there.

✓ I usually prepare my assignments there.

Errors: 'I have mail prepare' is ungrammatical and likely a wrong word choice; 'assignment' should be plural if speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'usually' for habitual action and 'prepare my assignments' to express regular activity.

× Actually I'm not sure because I haven't think of that problem but maybe I will be a doctor because I major in pharmacy and most of the students learn that major choose to be a doctor.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure because I haven't thought about that yet, but maybe I will become a doctor because I major in Pharmacy and most students who study that major choose to be doctors.

Errors: incorrect negative perfect 'haven't think' should be 'haven't thought' (past participle); missing preposition 'about'; 'I will be a doctor' can be 'I will become a doctor' for clarity; 'major in pharmacy' tense consistency and capitalization; 'most of the students learn that major choose to be a doctor' is ungrammatical — should be 'most students who study that major choose to be doctors.' Suggestion: use present perfect with past participle, include 'about', use relative clause 'who study', and plural 'doctors'.