Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、简洁，并在主题句后提供1-2句具体补充。减少语气词和重复，注意语法（e.g. "a big fan of anatomy"）。可用连接词把信息连贯起来。

例: I'm currently a student at Chengdu University of Traditional Chinese Medicine, where I study rehabilitation. I particularly enjoy anatomy because it helps me understand how the body moves and recovers, which is essential for my future work.

提案: 回答需更准确、语法更规范，减少停顿和重复。先给主题句说明身份/地点，再用一两句具体说明工作内容和时间，用连接词提高流畅性。

例: I don't have a full-time job because I'm a student, but I work part-time at a hospital during my summer and winter vacations. I assist rehabilitation doctors with patient care, such as helping with exercises and recording progress.

提案: 避免使用不恰当词汇（如 'steal'），应用更准确的表达并给出具体理由。先给直接回答（yes/no/mostly），然后用1-2句举例说明好处，注意连贯性。

例: Yes, it's a great place to work because you gain practical experience that you can't get from books. For example, you can interact with patients and learn rehabilitation techniques directly from experienced doctors.

提案: 回答要更简洁有力，使用更自然的短语（如 'work with patients'、'learn different rehabilitation techniques'）。提供一两个具体的收益例子，避免冗长重复。

例: Definitely. Working in the hospital allows me to work closely with patients and learn different rehabilitation techniques from our instructors, which has greatly improved my clinical skills.

提案: 回答需要更流畅且语法正确。先直接回答（still deciding），然后给出明确的目标和具体方式，减少重复和口头语。

例: I'm still deciding my exact career path, but I know I want to make a positive impact on patients' lives. I might continue working in hospitals or start my own clinic, focusing on improving rehabilitation outcomes and patient care.

× I'm currently a student at Chengdu University of Traditional Chinese Medicine.

✓ I'm currently a student at Chengdu University of Traditional Chinese Medicine.

原句语法正确，无需修改。

× Uh, I'm doing a degree in rehabilitation.

✓ I'm doing a degree in rehabilitation.

原句语法正确，doing 用法正确表示正在学习学位。

× Uh, I'm big fan of anatomy, uh, anatomy.

✓ I'm a big fan of anatomy.

缺少不定冠词 a，主语与名词搭配错误。建议：名词前加不定冠词，去掉重复词。

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

原句中的“>”为多余符号，不属于语法错误但应删除以符合书写规范。

× I'm a student now and I always have the part time job in the hospital.

✓ I'm a student now and I always have a part-time job at the hospital.

需要不定冠词 a 以及连字符连接的复合形容词 part-time，并且介词搭配应为 at the hospital（表示在医院有工作）。属于冠词与介词用法问题（22/11），主要归为时态/表达修正。

× Uh, in my summer vacation or winter vacation, uh, I would go to a hospital to uh get assist assistant job for the rehabilitation Dr. and help them manage the patients.

✓ In my summer or winter vacation, I would go to a hospital to get an assistant job for the rehabilitation doctor and help them manage patients.

错误包括冗余词汇（assist assistant），缺少冠词 an，doctor 缩写应完整或小写 doctor，patients 前不需要定冠词 the（泛指病人）。建议去掉重复词，补充冠词，简化表达。

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Is it a good place to work?

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× Mostly, to be honest, you can steal many knowledges.

✓ Mostly, to be honest, you can gain a lot of knowledge.

英语中不能用 steal knowledge 意为“学到”，且 knowledge 为不可数名词，不能用 plural forms；应使用 gain/learn 和 a lot of knowledge。建议使用正确动词与不可数名词形式。

× You cannot study books.

✓ You can't learn everything from books.

原句直译不通顺，常用表达是不能从书本学到一切，需使用完整句型并保持否定意义。

× And in the hospital you can, uh, contact with the patients and you will make the conversation with them and you will learn the, uh, rehabilitation skills, uh, with the, with the doctor.

✓ And in the hospital you can contact patients, have conversations with them, and learn rehabilitation skills with the doctor.

英语中 contact 与人连用不加介词 with 更自然；make the conversation 不地道，应使用 have conversations；多余重复的 with the。建议简化并使用固定搭配。

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

考官问喜不喜欢工作地点，通常用 Do you like... 而非 Would you like...（后者多用于提出请求或建议）。将时态/情态调整为一般现在时更恰当。

× Definitely in the hospital I can contact with the patients and learn the different technology about rehabilitation with our teachers and I also can improve my capacity in the rehabilitation.

✓ Definitely. In the hospital I can contact patients and learn different rehabilitation techniques from our teachers, and I can also improve my abilities in rehabilitation.

需要拆句以提高清晰度；contact with 改为 contact + 直接宾语；technology 用法需改为 techniques 或 skills；capacity 用复数 abilities 更自然；介词 from teachers 更合适。建议简化结构并使用正确名词搭配。

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× Well, to be honest, I'm still figuring out that out.

✓ Well, to be honest, I'm still figuring that out.

短语 figuring out 后面不需要再加 that out；原句有冗余的 that。建议将短语连贯使用。

× Uh, but one thing, I, uh, but one thing for sure is I want to make some difference, uh, whether in hospital or start my own business, uh, I will do some positive impact on the world and give the helpful to the patients.

✓ One thing for sure is that I want to make a difference — whether in a hospital or by starting my own business. I want to have a positive impact on the world and help patients.

原句有冗余重复（but one thing... but one thing）、需要连词引导 that，make some difference 常用表达为 make a difference；介词短语应为 in a hospital 或 by starting my own business；do some positive impact 不自然，应改为 have a positive impact；give the helpful 语法错误，应改为 help patients。建议精简句子，使用固定搭配并注意冠词与动词搭配。