Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise, correct small errors, and use clear linking to show two jobs. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add brief supporting details with proper grammar (e.g., 'UX designer' and 'work remotely'). Keep it under 4–5 sentences.

例: I currently work as a UX designer at Phenom Technologies, a startup in Kathmandu. In addition, I run my own design agency that works remotely for international clients. We primarily develop web applications and mobile apps.

提案: Open with a direct answer (place), then give one or two concise reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid repetition ('also' repeated) and check verb forms (reduce → reduces). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I work in Kathmandu, Nepal. I usually work from home because my job can be done remotely, which gives me flexibility and reduces commuting time.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific reasons. Correct grammar (it → it distracts me less; helps → helps me; needed → need). Use linking words ('because', 'so') and avoid overly long sentences.

例: Yes, it's a good place to work because I've transformed a small, cozy room into a dedicated studio with only my favorite, essential items. This setup distracts me less and helps me work more productively, and everything I need is within reach.

提案: Give a clear, natural reason why you like it. Fix phrasing and tense (friends I studied with at school, college and university; my boss is too). Avoid vague praise like 'everything we do is awesome' — provide a concrete example of teamwork or atmosphere.

例: Yes, I really like my workplace because many of my colleagues are friends I studied with at school, college and university, and even my boss is someone I know well. Because of that familiarity, we collaborate easily and the working atmosphere is relaxed and supportive.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plan, then give specific steps and reasons. Avoid negative, blunt phrases like 'they are very bad' — instead explain problems and your intended improvements. Use plural/singular correctly (user research on Nepali users) and concise phrasing.

例: In the future, I plan to expand my design agency into a user-research team. We will conduct research with Nepali users to identify usability and accessibility issues in government and NGO applications, and then propose practical design improvements to make these services easier to use.

× Currently I'm working as a UX you a designer at Phenom Technologies, which is a startup company from Nepal.

✓ Currently I'm working as a UX designer at Phenom Technologies, which is a startup company from Nepal.

The original sentence contains an extraneous word 'you a' making the sentence ungrammatical. Remove the extra words to restore proper noun phrase 'a UX designer'. Ensure article 'a' precedes 'UX designer' and keep present continuous 'I'm working' for current employment.

× Additionally, I also run my own design agency where we work remote for remote clients.

✓ Additionally, I also run my own design agency where we work remotely for remote clients.

The adverb 'remotely' should be used to modify the verb 'work', not the adjective 'remote'. Use the -ly adverb form 'remotely'. Also the phrase 'for remote clients' is acceptable, but consider removing duplicate 'remote' if redundant.

× We work on web applications and mobile app development.

✓ We work on web applications and mobile applications development.

The original mixes plural and a noun phrase unevenly. Use parallel structure: 'web applications and mobile applications development' or better 'web and mobile application development'. Maintain consistent plural forms for parallel nouns.

× I work in Kathmandu, Nepal and talking about my workspace, I usually work from my home because my office work can be done remotely and does not need my physical presence and also working from home gives me flexibility and also reduce the commuting time.

✓ I work in Kathmandu, Nepal. Talking about my workspace, I usually work from home because my office work can be done remotely and does not require my physical presence. Working from home gives me flexibility and reduces commuting time.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and incorrect preposition 'from my home' is less idiomatic than 'from home'; verb 'need' should be 'require' to match formality; subject-verb agreement 'reduce' should be 'reduces' to agree with singular subject 'Working from home'; split into shorter sentences to fix sentence structure errors and improve clarity.

× Yes, this is because I have turned my small cozy room into my working studio where I have kept only my favorite things.

✓ Yes, this is because I have turned my small, cozy room into my working studio where I have kept only my favorite things.

Add a comma between coordinate adjectives 'small' and 'cozy' (order of adjectives), which improves readability. Grammatically the sentence is otherwise acceptable; punctuation clarifies description.

× That way it will distract me less and helps me enhance my productivity while work and also I can find everything that I needed easily within reach.

✓ That way it distracts me less and helps me enhance my productivity while working, and I can find everything I need easily within reach.

Use consistent present tense: 'distracts' matches general statement rather than 'will distract'. 'While work' is incorrect; use present participle 'while working'. 'Needed' should be present 'need' to match habitual present. Also add comma and conjunctions to improve sentence structure.

× Yes, I really love my workplace. This is because I have my friends who I've studied from my school, college, then university and my boss is also even from.

✓ Yes, I really love my workplace. This is because I have friends whom I studied with at school, college, and university, and even my boss is from there.

Use 'whom' or 'that' with proper preposition 'studied with' rather than 'I've studied from'. Order and prepositions fixed: 'at school, college, and university' is idiomatic. 'My boss is also even from' is ungrammatical; change to 'even my boss is from there'.

× We know each other very well that way.

✓ That way, we know each other very well.

Reorder phrase for natural English: placing 'That way' at the beginning clarifies the cause-effect relationship. Original word order is awkward.

× Everything we do is awesome.

✓ Everything we do is great.

Sentence is grammatically correct, but 'awesome' is informal and may be acceptable; suggested alternative 'great' is slightly more neutral. No structural grammar error; change is stylistic.

× In the future, I am planning to expand my design agency into a research team so that I can do a user research on Nepali people, Nepali users and improve the overall user experience and accessibility of applications of our government and non government since they are very bad.

✓ In the future, I plan to expand my design agency into a research team so that I can conduct user research on Nepali people and improve the overall user experience and accessibility of government and non-government applications, which are currently poor.

Use 'plan to' for future intention rather than 'am planning to' (both acceptable, but 'plan to' is more concise). Use 'conduct user research' not 'do a user research'; remove redundancy 'Nepali people, Nepali users' to 'Nepali people'. Use parallel noun phrases 'government and non-government applications'. 'Since they are very bad' is vague and informal; replace with 'which are currently poor' for clarity and formality.