Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: state whether you are a student or worker, specify your field and institution briefly, and avoid unrelated words. Use a simple topic sentence followed by one clarifying detail. Keep it natural and grammatical.

例: I am a university student. I study Computer Science at ATC University.

提案: Answer the question directly and coherently. Say where you study/work, then give one or two clear reasons or details about the place. Avoid unclear phrases and filler words; use linking phrases like “because” or “which” to make reasons logical.

例: I study at ATC University, where I am in the Computer Science department. It is a supportive environment because the staff and classmates share knowledge and practical experience.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific details. Avoid contradicting statements. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” and describe concrete aspects (facilities, staff, atmosphere) that make it good.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the classrooms and labs are well-equipped, and the teachers are helpful and friendly.

提案: Answer directly and use relevant vocabulary (like “study” or “work” rather than “play”). Explain briefly why you like it with one supporting detail. Keep sentences natural and avoid slips.

例: Yes, I like studying there because the people are friendly and the facilities help me learn effectively.

提案: State your plan clearly with correct grammar and give one or two specific details (which country, field, or reason). Use linking words such as “so” or “because” to explain motives. Avoid informal contractions like “gonna.”

例: I plan to apply for a scholarship to study abroad in Germany so I can gain advanced knowledge in computer science and improve my career prospects.

× And I am a Sudan at university and my mature age conscious science.

✓ I am Sudanese and a university student studying computer science.

The original sentence uses incorrect adjective forms and word order. 'Sudan' should be the adjective 'Sudanese'. 'At university' is better expressed as 'a university student'. 'My mature age conscious science' is ungrammatical and likely aims to say 'studying computer science', so use that phrase. Improve by using correct adjective forms and the standard phrase 'a university student studying [subject]'.

× AM study at ATC university where I study computer science.

✓ I study at ATC University, where I am studying computer science.

The original lacks a subject and verb agreement and misuses capitalization. Use 'I study at' or 'I am studying at'. Adding a comma before the relative clause improves clarity. Maintain consistent tense: 'I am studying computer science' or 'I study computer science'.

× Yeah, every atmosphere that they decompose rescue me.

✓ I learn from every situation and it helps me grow.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Every atmosphere that they decompose rescue me' does not follow English sentence structure. The intended meaning seems to be gaining experience from environments or situations, so rephrase to 'I learn from every situation and it helps me grow.' Use clear subjects and verbs and logical expressions.

× Umm experience and knowledge.

✓ I gain experience and knowledge.

This fragment lacks a finite verb and subject. Turning it into a complete sentence with subject and verb ('I gain') makes the meaning clear and grammatical.

× Of course this a good place to study.

✓ Of course, this is a good place to study.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is'. Adding 'is' completes the sentence. Also add a comma after 'Of course' for natural phrasing. The definite article 'this' is fine here when followed by the verb.

× There are good environment and the people there are friendly and hate each other.

✓ There is a good environment, the people there are friendly, and they do not hate each other.

'Environment' is a singular noun, so use 'there is' not 'there are'. The original also contradicts 'friendly' by adding 'hate each other'; likely intended 'do not hate each other'. Add a comma and conjunctions to join clauses properly. Ensure verb agreement ('they do not hate').

× Of course I like to play where I study.

✓ Of course I like the place where I study.

The original uses 'like to play' which changes meaning. The question asks if they like the place, so use 'I like the place where I study.' If intending to say enjoying time there, 'I like being at the place where I study' works. Use correct noun phrase instead of verb 'play'.

× My future study plan is I gonna apply scholarship to another country and study abroad and learn a lot of knowledge from. Their.

✓ My future study plan is to apply for a scholarship to another country, study abroad, and gain a lot of knowledge there.

Use 'to apply for' rather than 'apply scholarship'. 'Gonna' is informal and ungrammatical in written form; use 'am going to' or the infinitive 'to apply'. 'Learn a lot of knowledge from. Their.' has pronoun and punctuation errors: use 'gain a lot of knowledge there.' Also keep parallel verbs: 'apply..., study..., and gain...'.