Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'hometowns' nên là 'hometown' và 'faithful landscape' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn.

例: My hometown is in the countryside of Vietnam. I love it because it has beautiful landscapes and the air is very clean, which makes it less polluted than the city.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ như 'a long and a long river' và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'pupil' không đúng trong ngữ cảnh này, có thể bạn muốn nói 'people'. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: In my hometown, I like the beautiful scenery and the long river. Also, the people are very friendly.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh dùng từ 'roles' không phù hợp. Bạn nên dùng từ như 'roots' để diễn đạt ý gốc rễ, quê hương.

例: I have lived in my hometown since I was born. Although I am currently studying and working in the city, I often visit my hometown to spend time with my family because I miss them a lot. These visits help me relax and stay connected to my roots.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như 'Is dependent', 'immortal' không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu hoàn chỉnh để thể hiện ý kiến của mình.

例: It depends, but I think my hometown is a great place for young people because it has many facilities. For example, there are good schools and entertainment centers where young people can spend their free time.

× My hometowns is in the countryside of Vietnam.

✓ My hometown is in the countryside of Vietnam.

The word 'hometowns' is plural, but the verb 'is' is singular, causing a subject-verb agreement error. Since the speaker refers to one hometown, 'hometown' should be singular to match the singular verb 'is'.

× it has faithful landscape.

✓ it has beautiful landscape.

The adjective 'faithful' is incorrect in this context. The correct adjective to describe pleasing scenery is 'beautiful'.

× In my hometown, I like a beautiful scenery and a long and a long river.

✓ In my hometown, I like the beautiful scenery and a long river.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'a long and a long river' is repetitive; it should be 'a long river'.

× Also, the pupil is very friendly here.

✓ Also, the people are very friendly here.

'Pupil' refers to a single student, which does not fit the context. The intended meaning is likely 'people', which is plural and fits the context of friendliness in a community.

× Is dependent.

✓ It depends.

The sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. 'Is dependent' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'It depends' to express conditionality.

× my hometown is of great place for young people because it's immortal and hence many facilities.

✓ my hometown is a great place for young people because it is modern and has many facilities.

The phrase 'of great place' is incorrect; it should be 'a great place'. The word 'immortal' is incorrect in this context; likely, 'modern' was intended. Also, 'hence many facilities' is awkward; 'has many facilities' is correct.

× there are good schools and entertainment center where young people can spend their free time.

✓ there are good schools and entertainment centers where young people can spend their free time.

'Entertainment center' should be plural 'entertainment centers' to agree with 'schools' and to indicate multiple facilities.