Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và hoàn thành câu đầy đủ. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể về thành phố để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: I was born and have always lived in Ho Chi Minh City, the largest and most modern metropolis in Vietnam. It is famous for its vibrant culture and bustling markets, which attract many visitors every year.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách mạch lạc và tránh sử dụng nhiều từ ngữ thừa như "uh". Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

例: I really like Ho Chi Minh City because it has many cultural attractions such as museums and festivals. For example, the city hosts colorful performances during the Tet Festival, which showcase traditional music and dance.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn về khoảng thời gian sống. Tránh lặp từ và hoàn thành câu đầy đủ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I have lived in Ho Chi Minh City since I was a child. I love this city and feel emotionally attached to it. I don't plan to live elsewhere because it offers everything I need.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi phát âm hoặc từ sai. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cung cấp lý do cụ thể, ví dụ rõ ràng để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, Ho Chi Minh City is a great place for young people because it is the biggest and most modern city in Vietnam. Many young people come here to find job opportunities and develop their careers, such as working in the technology or service industries.

× This city has many cultural adjustments and many many.

✓ This city has many cultural attractions and many more.

The word 'adjustments' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'attractions' to refer to cultural points of interest. Also, 'many many' is incomplete and should be replaced with 'many more' to indicate additional items.

× Really like Ho Chi Minh City, uh, because it's had many uh, cultural attractions like uh, museums, uh, and uh, festival events, for example, the city halls, uh, the test festival with uh, colorful, uh, performance, uh, which.

✓ I really like Ho Chi Minh City because it has many cultural attractions like museums and festival events, for example, the city hall and the Tet festival with colorful performances.

The sentence lacks a subject 'I' and uses incorrect tense 'it's had' instead of 'it has'. Also, 'city halls' should be singular 'city hall' as a specific building, and 'test festival' is a misspelling of 'Tet festival'. The word 'performance' should be plural 'performances' to match 'colorful' and the plural events.

× I have lived in the city when I was a child.

✓ I have lived in the city since I was a child.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' should be used with 'since' to indicate the starting point in the past continuing to present. Using 'when I was a child' with present perfect is incorrect; 'since' is appropriate here.

× maybe in the future I don't have a plan to live in an, a different city because this city has everything I and it.

✓ Maybe in the future I don't plan to live in a different city because this city has everything I need.

The phrase 'don't have a plan' is awkward; 'don't plan' is more natural. The article 'an' before 'different city' is incorrect; it should be 'a' because 'different' starts with a consonant sound. The sentence is incomplete and should end with 'everything I need'.

× Gosh, yes, because achievement City is uh, blackest and most modern metropolis in Vietnam and many young people go here to find an opportunity for work and it is effective way for many people to improve their work, for example.

✓ Gosh, yes, because Ho Chi Minh City is the biggest and most modern metropolis in Vietnam, and many young people come here to find job opportunities. It is an effective way for many people to improve their careers, for example.

The word 'achievement' is incorrect; it should be 'Ho Chi Minh'. 'Blackest' is a wrong adjective; the intended word is 'biggest'. The sentence lacks articles 'the' before 'biggest' and 'most modern'. 'Go here' is better as 'come here' in this context. 'An effective way' requires the article 'an'. 'Improve their work' is better expressed as 'improve their careers' or 'job prospects'.