Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和口语填充词较多，建议减少“uh”“umm”等填充词，注意介词使用，如“in the eastern of China”应为“in the east of China”，并且时间表达应为“about one hour”。

例: My hometown is Nantong, a small city located in the east of China. It is about one hour away from Shanghai by train.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够连贯，建议注意冠词使用，如“a airport”应为“an airport”，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: One thing I really like about my hometown is its transportation system. For example, Nantong has an airport and two train stations, which make traveling very convenient.

提案: 回答较好，但可以使用连接词使句子更连贯，同时丰富细节。

例: I have lived in the city for about 10 years since it is my birthplace. Moreover, I really like the environment because it is clean, and the community is very helpful.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，建议注意句子完整性和冠词使用，如“for graduate”应为“for graduates”，并使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, it is. My hometown offers advanced education for students. Additionally, it is located near Shanghai, so there are plenty of job opportunities for graduates.

× My hometown is Nantong, a small city and uh, it's located in the eastern of China, Umm, it is about 1 hours away from Shanghai by train.

✓ My hometown is Nantong, a small city, and uh, it's located in the east of China. Umm, it is about 1 hour away from Shanghai by train.

“in the eastern of China”中的“eastern”应为名词形式“east”，且“in the east of China”是正确的表达。时间距离表达中，“1 hours”应为单数“1 hour”。

× My hometown is Nantong, a small city and uh, it's located in the eastern of China, Umm, it is about 1 hours away from Shanghai by train.

✓ My hometown is Nantong, a small city, and uh, it's located in the east of China. Umm, it is about 1 hour away from Shanghai by train.

数字1后面应使用单数名词，故“1 hours”应改为“1 hour”。

× One thing I really like my hometown is transportation system.

✓ One thing I really like about my hometown is the transportation system.

“transportation system”前缺少冠词“the”，且“system”是单数，符合语境。

× Lantern has a airport and two train stations.

✓ Nantong has an airport and two train stations.

“Lantern”应为地名“Nantong”，且“a airport”前应使用“an”因为“airport”以元音音素开头。

× Lantern has a airport and two train stations.

✓ Nantong has an airport and two train stations.

冠词使用错误，“a”应改为“an”，因为“airport”以元音音素开头。

× It makes my traveling very convenient.

✓ It makes my travel very convenient.

“traveling”作为动名词在此处不合适，使用名词“travel”更自然。

× I have lived in the city for about 10 years because it is my birthplace.

✓ I have lived in the city for about 10 years because it is my birthplace.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× I really like the environment and the community is very helpful.

✓ I really like the environment, and the community is very helpful.

句子中缺少连接词“and”，导致句子结构不完整。

× Yes, it is My hometown offers advanced education for students in.

✓ Yes, it is. My hometown offers advanced education for students.

句子缺少标点符号，且“in”多余，应删除。

× Additionally, it is located near Shanghai, so it has plenty of job opportunities for graduate.

✓ Additionally, it is located near Shanghai, so it has plenty of job opportunities for graduates.

“graduate”应为复数形式“graduates”，表示“毕业生”。