Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn nên rõ ràng và trực tiếp hơn. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng nơi bạn sinh ra và lớn lên, tránh dùng thì không phù hợp và câu dài không cần thiết. Hãy sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tự nhiên hơn.

例: My hometown is Kochi District in Ho Chi Minh City, where I was born and have lived all my life.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'a vast few' nên là 'vast fields' hoặc 'a vast view'. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: I like the peaceful atmosphere of my hometown because it is a rural area surrounded by vast fields and fresh air, which makes me feel relaxed and calm.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành đúng cách và tránh những câu không liên quan hoặc sai ngữ cảnh. Hãy nói trực tiếp về khoảng thời gian bạn đã sống ở đó.

例: I have lived there for about 16 years since I was born, so it holds a special place in my heart.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'urban area' nên có mạo từ 'an', 'recreational' cần danh từ đi kèm. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I don't think my hometown is suitable for young people because they usually prefer urban areas with many buildings, entertainment, and recreational facilities, whereas my hometown is peaceful and quiet.

× I have been living in Kochi District, Ho Chi Minh City when I was born and it is my hometown too.

✓ I have been living in Kochi District, Ho Chi Minh City since I was born and it is my hometown too.

The phrase 'when I was born' is incorrect here because the present perfect continuous tense 'have been living' requires a starting point in time, which should be expressed with 'since' rather than 'when'. 'Since' indicates the starting point of an action continuing to the present, while 'when' refers to a specific point in the past.

× My favorite thing about my hometown is the atmosphere because it is a rural area so it's surrounded by a vast few and fresh air.

✓ My favorite thing about my hometown is the atmosphere because it is a rural area so it's surrounded by a vast few trees and fresh air.

The word 'few' is a quantifier used with countable nouns, but 'few' alone is incorrect here. The intended meaning is likely 'a vast few trees' or 'a vast number of trees'. Since 'few' is countable, it must be followed by a plural noun. The original sentence missed the noun after 'few', causing a grammatical error.

× The natural environment make me feel relaxed and calm.

✓ The natural environment makes me feel relaxed and calm.

The subject 'The natural environment' is singular, so the verb must be singular as well. 'Make' is plural, so it should be changed to 'makes' to agree with the singular subject.

× I have been living there since I was born, about 16 years. It is also it is a long time so it make me realize that Gucci has a park in my heart.

✓ I have been living there since I was born, about 16 years. It is a long time, so it makes me realize that Gucci has a place in my heart.

The sentence contains redundancy ('It is also it is') and subject-verb agreement errors ('make' should be 'makes'). Also, 'park' is likely a typo or incorrect word choice; 'place' fits better in this context. The sentence structure is corrected by removing redundancy, fixing verb agreement, and choosing the correct noun.

× I don't think it is suitable for young people because from my perspective the young people love urban area with a lot of building, entertainment, recreational.

✓ I don't think it is suitable for young people because, from my perspective, young people love urban areas with a lot of buildings, entertainment, and recreational activities.

The sentence has incorrect singular/plural forms ('urban area' should be 'urban areas', 'building' should be 'buildings') and missing nouns after adjectives ('recreational' should be followed by a noun like 'activities'). Also, commas are added for clarity.

× So I don't think the peace peaceful place like my hometown is suitable for them.

✓ So I don't think a peaceful place like my hometown is suitable for them.

The phrase 'peace peaceful' is redundant and incorrect. The correct adjective is 'peaceful'. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'peaceful place' to make the sentence grammatically correct.