Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し不自然で冗長な表現があります。例えば、「a Shizuoka prefecture」ではなく「Shizuoka Prefecture」と言い、「uh」などのフィラーは避けましょう。また、「I love this area very well」は不自然なので、「I really love this area」と言い換えると良いです。

例: My hometown is Shizuoka Prefecture in Japan, which is famous for Mount Fuji, the highest mountain in the country. I really love this area because of its beautiful nature.

提案: 文法的な誤りと不自然な表現が目立ちます。「There has」ではなく「There is」を使い、「and so on」は曖昧なので具体的に説明しましょう。また、「It offers great natural」は意味が不明瞭なので、「It offers great natural scenery」など具体的に表現してください。

例: My favorite thing about my hometown is its natural environment. There is a beautiful stream, Mount Fuji, and many other scenic spots that attract visitors.

提案: 回答は比較的明確ですが、「I was transferred from Shizuoka Prefecture due to my job」は過去形で少し混乱を招きます。現在の状況を明確にし、「I sometimes come back」も「I sometimes visit」など自然な表現にしましょう。

例: I lived in Shizuoka Prefecture for about 18 years before I was transferred to another city for my job. However, I still visit my hometown sometimes.

提案: 文が断片的で不完全です。「because there has a. Great river and mountains and parks」は文法的に誤りで、意味も伝わりにくいです。接続詞を使い、理由を明確に述べましょう。また、「public transportation」についても具体的に説明すると良いです。

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it is located between the city and rural areas. It has beautiful rivers, mountains, and parks, and also offers convenient public transportation.

× My hometown is a Shizuoka prefecture in Japan which has uh, highest mountain in Japan called Mount Fuji.

✓ My hometown is Shizuoka Prefecture in Japan, which has the highest mountain in Japan called Mount Fuji.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'Shizuoka prefecture' because prefecture names are proper nouns and do not require an article. Also, 'highest mountain' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific, unique mountain.

× I love this area very well.

✓ I love this area very much.

The adverb 'well' is incorrectly used to express degree of liking. 'Very well' usually describes ability or skill, while 'very much' correctly expresses strong liking.

× There has a great stream and highest mountain in the country and so on.

✓ There is a great stream and the highest mountain in the country, and so on.

The phrase 'There has' is incorrect; the correct existential construction is 'There is' for singular or uncountable nouns. Also, 'highest mountain' requires the definite article 'the'.

× It offers great natural.

✓ It offers great natural beauty.

The word 'natural' is an adjective and cannot stand alone as a noun here. The noun 'beauty' should be added to complete the phrase.

× I was transferred from Shizuoka Prefecture due to my job.

✓ I was transferred from Shizuoka Prefecture because of my job.

While 'due to' is not strictly incorrect, 'because of' is more natural in this context to explain the reason for the transfer.

× Yes, my hometown is in the middle between city and rural area because there has a. Great river and mountains and parks.

✓ Yes, my hometown is in the middle between the city and rural areas because there is a great river, mountains, and parks.

'There has' is incorrect; the correct form is 'there is' for singular or uncountable nouns. Also, 'city' and 'rural area' need articles and plural form for 'areas' to be natural.

× In addition, public transportation.

✓ In addition, there is public transportation.

The original sentence lacks a verb and is incomplete. Adding 'there is' completes the sentence structure.