Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural by saying "My hometown is Istanbul, Turkey." This is a more common and natural way to express location in English.

例: My hometown is Istanbul, Turkey.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like "umm" and be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details. For example, mention specific historic places or describe the views.

例: I like Istanbul mainly because of its warm weather and beautiful historic places, such as the Hagia Sophia. Additionally, the city offers stunning views of the Bosphorus Strait.

提案: Answer the question directly and clearly. Instead of mentioning your age, state the duration you have lived there. Also, avoid unnecessary filler words and incorrect prepositions.

例: I have lived in Istanbul for all my 18 years.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to organize your ideas and provide specific examples of activities young people can enjoy.

例: Definitely, Istanbul is a great place for young people because there are many activities to enjoy, such as traveling around the city, trying different foods, and visiting vibrant cafes and clubs.

× I most like about Istanbul, probably, umm, it's weather.

✓ What I like most about Istanbul is probably its weather.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it's' (contraction of 'it is') instead of the possessive pronoun 'its'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward. The corrected sentence uses 'What I like most about Istanbul is probably its weather' to clearly express the idea.

× Maybe it's an Istanbul weather is umm, kind of warm, not that cold.

✓ Maybe the weather in Istanbul is kind of warm, not that cold.

'Weather' is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'an'. Also, 'it's an Istanbul weather is' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence uses 'the weather in Istanbul' to properly refer to the specific weather.

× And I love uh, historic place and good views.

✓ And I love historic places and good views.

The singular 'historic place' should be plural 'historic places' to match the general statement about liking multiple places. This correction improves grammatical agreement and clarity.

× Uh, I'm 18 years old and I'm still living in there.

✓ Uh, I'm 18 years old and I'm still living there.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'there' because 'there' already indicates location. Removing 'in' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Definitely Istanbul is a good place for the young people.

✓ Definitely, Istanbul is a good place for young people.

The phrase 'the young people' is unnecessarily specific; 'young people' without 'the' is more natural and general. Also, a comma after 'Definitely' improves readability.

× There's so much to young people's do to travel, for example, drink something, eat something.

✓ There is so much for young people to do, like travel, drink, and eat.

'So much' is used with uncountable nouns, but here activities are countable. Also, 'to young people's do' is incorrect; it should be 'for young people to do'. The corrected sentence uses proper quantifiers and structure.

× There's a lot of things the young peoples can do.

✓ There are a lot of things young people can do.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' and should be 'there are' for plural 'things'. Also, 'young peoples' is incorrect; 'young people' is the correct plural form. The correction fixes subject-verb agreement and plural noun usage.