Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and natural: correct place names and grammar, avoid redundancies, and keep within 3–4 clear sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Use correct forms (e.g., 'Sylhet' if that is intended) and check word choice ('skinny' → 'scenic' or 'rolling').

例: My hometown is Sylhet, a city in northeast Bangladesh. It is famous for its rolling tea gardens, green hills, and warm hospitality. Even though I’ve traveled to many places, Sylhet always feels like home to me.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then two supporting reasons with specific details and linking words. Fix grammar and awkward phrases (e.g., 'it offers', 'sense of belonging', 'a relaxed pace of life'). Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear clauses.

例: I like Sylhet because it offers both natural beauty and a strong sense of community. For example, the friendly neighbours and local festivals make me feel connected, and the relaxed pace of life reduces stress compared with big cities. Although I sometimes consider moving for work, I know I would miss these qualities.

提案: Use correct vocabulary and concise phrasing. Begin with a clear time statement, then add a supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., 'because', 'although'). Correct errors like 'living silly' → 'living there', 'other city' → 'other cities' and avoid repetition.

例: I have lived there since I was born, so it’s been over twenty years. Although I spent periods in other cities for study and travel, I always return, and living there for so long has helped me build a strong connection with the community.

提案: Be specific and balanced: state your opinion clearly, then support it with two particular reasons or examples and a linking word. Fix grammar and collocations ('a mix', 'modern facilities', 'a great place'). Avoid repeating 'young people' unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I think it’s a great place for young people because it combines natural surroundings with modern facilities. For instance, there are good schools, reliable transport links to nearby cities, and community events that help young people socialise. For these reasons I feel happy and comfortable living there.

× My hometown is Silat, a beautiful city located in the northeast part of Bangladesh.

✓ My hometown is Sylhet, a beautiful city located in the northeastern part of Bangladesh.

The city name was misspelled (Sylhet). 'Northeastern' is the correct adjective form to modify 'part' or the region; 'northeast part' is awkward. Use the adjective 'northeastern' to describe the region. Also ensure proper noun spelling is correct.

× It's known for its skinny tea garden, lush green hills, and warm hospitality.

✓ It's known for its tea gardens, lush green hills, and warm hospitality.

'Skinny' is an inappropriate adjective for tea gardens; use plural 'tea gardens' to match the general idea. Use an appropriate adjective or omit it. Also changed singular to plural for consistency with multiple hills and gardens.

× Although I have traveled too many places, Silent will feel like home to me.

✓ Although I have traveled to many places, Sylhet will always feel like home to me.

'Too many places' is unnatural here; 'to many places' is correct for the meaning. 'Silent' is a misspelling of 'Sylhet'. 'Will feel' should be 'will always feel' to express ongoing sentiment. Fixed word order and spelling.

× Yes, truly love my hometown because it's offered both natural beauty and sense of belonging, the people are friendly and the place of life is much more relaxed.

✓ Yes, I truly love my hometown because it offers both natural beauty and a sense of belonging; the people are friendly and life here is much more relaxed.

Missing subject 'I' causes ungrammatical clause. Verb tense/voice: 'it's offered' is wrong; use present simple 'it offers' to describe a general truth. 'Sense of belonging' requires the article 'a'. 'The place of life' is awkward; 'life here' is natural. Use proper sentence connectors or punctuation.

× Composed a biggest city even though I sometimes think about moving, I know I will always miss the.

✓ Although it is not a large city, even though I sometimes think about moving, I know I will always miss it.

Original is fragmented and contains wrong word choice 'Composed a biggest city' which is ungrammatical. Rewrote to convey contrast: 'not a large city' or 'a small city'. Added missing object 'it' at the end. Ensure clause order and subject are clear.

× I've been living silly since I was born.

✓ I've been living here since I was born.

'Silly' is an incorrect word choice; likely intended 'here'. Use 'here' to indicate place. Present perfect continuous 'I've been living here' is correct for an action continuing from past to present.

× Although I have spent some time in other city for studies and travel, I always come back here.

✓ Although I have spent some time in other cities for study and travel, I always come back here.

Count noun 'city' needs plural 'cities' when unspecified multiple instances. Use 'for study and travel' or 'for my studies and travel'; 'study' as an activity is more natural here. Maintain present perfect for completed experiences.

× Living in the same place for a long long has helped me build a strong connection.

✓ Living in the same place for a long time has helped me build a strong connection.

'long long' is a repetition; use 'a long time'. Sentence structure otherwise fine. Keep present perfect 'has helped' to indicate past action with present relevance.

× Yeah, obviously my hometown is better for young people.

✓ Yes, obviously my hometown is a good place for young people.

'Better for young people' needs a comparison or reference; since none is given, 'a good place for young people' is clearer. 'Yeah' is informal; use 'Yes' in speaking test context.

× It has mix of natural beauty and friendly people and modern facilities which make it great place to live in for young people.

✓ It has a mix of natural beauty, friendly people, and modern facilities, which make it a great place to live for young people.

Missing article 'a' before 'mix' and before 'great place'. Added commas to separate items. Removed redundant 'in' after 'live'. Subject-verb agreement 'which make' refers to plural 'facilities, people, beauty' so 'make' is correct.

× I always feel happy and comfortable here.

✓ I always feel happy and comfortable here.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.