Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct article and verb usage, and add one specific detail. Use linking phrase if expanding. Avoid redundancy.

例: My hometown is Bangkok, the capital of Thailand. It is located in the central region of the country, and as a major city it has a very large population and a busy city life.

提案: Answer directly and use plural/singular correctly. Give one or two specific examples of conveniences or opportunities and use linking words for clarity.

例: I like the convenience of living in Bangkok; for example, there is extensive public transport and many shopping centers. Because of this, students and professionals can easily access good schools and job opportunities.

提案: Use correct tense for duration (present perfect) and give a single clear number. Avoid hesitations and false starts; be concise and natural.

例: I've lived in Bangkok since I was born, so it's been 33 years now and I don't plan to relocate in the near future.

提案: Answer directly and provide specific reasons with smoother grammar. Replace fillers and be precise about institutions; use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, it's a good place for young people because there are many well-known schools and universities in Bangkok, which offer strong academic programs and extracurricular activities that help students grow.

× My hometown is Bangkok, which is a capital of Thailand, and they're located in the center of this country.

✓ My hometown is Bangkok, which is the capital of Thailand, and it is located in the center of the country.

Use 'the' before 'capital' because there is only one capital of a country (definite article). 'They're' is contraction of 'they are' which is incorrect for a singular city; use 'it is'. Also 'this country' sounds odd when already naming the country; use 'the country' for reference consistency.

× So there are many people here because it is a habit of city.

✓ So there are many people here because it is a city habit.

The phrase 'a habit of city' is ungrammatical. Use 'city habit' or better 'because it is common in cities' to express the idea. Also article usage: 'a habit of city' should be rephrased to 'a city habit' or 'common in cities'.

× My hometown is the capital city, so there are the most convenient thing here and there's a lot of opportunity for everyone to study and work.

✓ My hometown is the capital city, so the most convenient things are here and there are many opportunities for everyone to study and work.

'The most convenient thing' is incorrect because you mean multiple conveniences; use plural 'things' and match verb 'are'. 'There's a lot of opportunity' should be pluralized to 'there are many opportunities' to agree in number and sound natural.

× I live there since I was born.

✓ I have lived there since I was born.

When indicating an action that began in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect tense 'have lived' with 'since' rather than simple present 'live'. This matches the time expression 'since I was born'.

× Right now it's been 30, thir, 33 years, almost 34 and I don't have the plan to relocate.

✓ Right now it's been about 33 years, almost 34, and I don't have plans to relocate.

Use 'about' for an approximate number and correct the number to a single value; 'I don't have the plan' is unnatural—use 'I don't have plans' or 'I don't plan to relocate'. Also 'it's been' is acceptable with present perfect meaning, but clarify the number.

× Yes, because there's a lot of famous school such as the elementary school, umm high school, even the university.

✓ Yes, because there are many famous schools, such as elementary schools, high schools, and universities.

'There's a lot of famous school' is incorrect: use plural 'there are many famous schools'. Also use plural forms for examples ('elementary schools', 'high schools', 'universities') and replace 'such as the' with 'such as' for general examples.

× The famous university is in the Bangkok.

✓ Famous universities are in Bangkok.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before a proper noun city like 'Bangkok' in this context. If referring to multiple institutions, use plural 'universities'. If you meant a specific university, say 'The famous university is in Bangkok' without 'the' before 'Bangkok'.