Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct grammar and place names, be concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “My hometown is Xingqiu City, in northern Taiwan”), then give one or two specific, accurate location details and a distinctive feature. Avoid filler words like “Umm” and repetition.

例: My hometown is Xingqiu City in northern Taiwan. It’s located just south of Taoyuan and near Miaoli County, and it’s well known for its windy climate and maple trees.

提案: Good main idea and comparison. Make sentences more natural and grammatically correct; use linking words (e.g. “although,” “because”) and give a concrete example to support ‘tranquility’. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I love the tranquility of my hometown because it’s much quieter than big cities. Although some people move there for jobs in the science park, the streets remain uncrowded, so I can enjoy peaceful walks in the evenings.

提案: Use a clearer, grammatically correct time expression and sequence. Start with the time span, then explain the exception using linking words like “although” or “however”. Correct verb tenses and give one precise detail about the period away.

例: I have lived in Xingqiu City for 25 years. However, I spent seven of those years studying in Tainan and Kaohsiung, so I only returned to my hometown about once a month during that time.

提案: Answer directly and expand briefly with reasons and a positive/negative balance. Use correct pluralization and connect ideas with linking words. Offer a suggestion or contrast to show a fuller view.

例: Not really, because the town lacks a developed public-transport system. For example, we only have buses and conventional trains, whereas cities like Taipei have subways and high-speed rail. This makes commuting harder for young people who need to travel for work or education.

× It's Xingqiu City is situated in the northern Taipei, below Tao Yuan and Umm.

✓ Xingqiu City is situated in northern Taipei, south of Taoyuan and near Yilan.

The original has redundant 'It's' and incorrect place prepositions and names. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the extra 'It's', use 'in northern Taipei' (no definite article) and correct prepositions: 'south of' rather than 'below', and use 'near' for proximity. Also correct place names to consistent English forms.

× It's Umm next to Miaoi City, and it's famous for wind and maples.

✓ It is next to Miaoli City, and it is famous for its wind and maple trees.

Using 'Umm' is filler; pronoun reference 'It's' repeated is informal and unclear — this is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12). Replace fillers with 'It is' and ensure possessive 'its' for 'famous for its...'. Use plural 'maple trees' or 'maples' but 'maple trees' is clearer.

× Despite more and more people moving to this city for working and science park, compared to the major cities like Taipei and Kaohsiung, it's relatively uncrowded.

✓ Despite more and more people moving to this city to work in the science park, compared to major cities like Taipei and Kaohsiung, it is relatively uncrowded.

This contains tense and verb form issues (ID 6). Use the infinitive 'to work' instead of 'for working', and 'the science park' or 'the science parks' depending on meaning. Also change contraction 'it's' to 'it is' for formality and clarity.

× It's been 25 years that I've lived in the city, although seven of those years I spend most of my time in Tainan and Gai because of studying and during that time only came back every once a month.

✓ I have lived in the city for 25 years, although for seven of those years I spent most of my time in Tainan and Kaohsiung for my studies, and during that time I only came back once a month.

Multiple past tense and structure problems (ID 5). Use present perfect 'I have lived...for 25 years' and past simple 'I spent' for the seven-year period. Use 'for my studies' instead of 'because of studying', and correct word order to include subject 'I' in 'I only came back once a month'. Replace place name 'Gai' with likely 'Kaohsiung' if intended.

× Not really because we don't have good transportation system.

✓ Not really, because we don't have a good transportation system.

Missing article and punctuation indicates a sentence structure error (ID 26). Add the indefinite article 'a' before 'good transportation system' and a comma after 'Not really' for clarity.

× For example we only have the basic ones like train and bus.

✓ For example, we only have basic options like trains and buses.

Quantifier and count noun agreement issue (ID 14). Use plural 'trains and buses' with 'basic options' rather than 'the basic ones'. Add a comma after 'For example'.

× Unlike Taipei, they have subway, airports and high speed rails.

✓ Unlike Taipei, it has subways, an airport, and high-speed rail.

Pronoun reference and third person singular agreement issue (ID 2). 'Taipei' is singular and should take 'it' rather than 'they'. Also use correct count nouns: 'subways', 'an airport' (or 'airports' if plural), and 'high-speed rail' (no plural 'rails'). Hyphenate 'high-speed'.