Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and include one or two specific details (e.g., city name, nearby landmarks) using clear linking words. Keep within 3–4 sentences and avoid run-on sentences. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific supporting detail.

例: My hometown is Manila, in the Philippines. It lies along Rizal Avenue, so it’s very accessible by bus and jeepney. I’ve lived there almost all my life, so I’m very familiar with the neighborhood.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and use full linking phrases (firstly, secondly). Add one specific example for each point to make the answer concrete and natural. Avoid short fragments and ensure grammatical completeness.

例: I like the convenience of my hometown. Firstly, it has reliable public transport—buses and jeepneys run frequently, so I can get to work quickly. Secondly, there are many shops and a weekly market nearby, which makes shopping easy.

提案: This answer is clear and direct; to improve further, split into two concise sentences and add a brief detail about what you know (e.g., favorite places or routes). Keep it natural and not overly long.

例: I have lived there for almost 30 years, basically since I was born. Because of that, I know the area very well, including the best routes to work and my favorite local restaurants.

提案: Answer directly with a brief opinion, then give two specific supporting reasons with examples or consequences. Use linking words (for example, moreover) correctly and avoid repeating the same phrase. Keep sentences varied and natural.

例: Yes, I think it’s a good place for young people. For example, public transport is frequent and cheap, so students can commute to school easily. Moreover, there are several shopping centers and a community sports center nearby, which gives them places to study and socialise.

× It is within the city and is located along the main road which makes it quite accessible and I've lived there for most of my life.

✓ It is within the city and located along the main road, which makes it quite accessible, and I have lived there for most of my life.

The original sentence used multiple clauses without correct connectors and contractions. 'which makes it quite accessible' is a non-restrictive relative clause and should be set off with a comma. Also avoid contraction 'I've' in formal responses; use 'I have'. Reordering to 'and located' removes redundancy of two 'is' verbs. Suggestion: separate clauses with commas and use full forms in spoken-test answers.'

× What I like about my hometown is the convenience it provides. Firstly has good public transport and secondly it allows for access to different shops.

✓ What I like about my hometown is the convenience it provides. Firstly, it has good public transport, and secondly, it allows access to different shops.

The second sentence was missing the subject 'it' after 'Firstly' and lacked commas for clarity. 'allows for access to' is wordy; 'allows access to' is more natural. Insert 'it' and commas to correct sentence structure and improve fluency.'

× I have lived there for almost 30 years, essentially since I was born, so I know the area very well.

✓ I have lived there for almost 30 years, essentially since I was born, so I know the area very well.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The present perfect 'have lived' is appropriate for an action continuing up to the present, and the rest of the sentence is coherent. No change needed.'

× It provides for good transportation, which makes it easier to go from one place to another.

✓ It provides good transportation, which makes it easier to go from one place to another.

The verb 'provide' does not need the preposition 'for' in this context. Remove 'for' to make the phrase 'provides good transportation.' This is the standard collocation.'

× Moreover, it provides access to different shops nearby, which makes it easier for these students to go.

✓ Moreover, it provides access to nearby shops, which makes it easier for young people to get what they need.

The phrase 'different shops nearby' is awkward; 'nearby shops' is more natural. The clause 'which makes it easier for these students to go' is vague and incomplete—'to go' where? Replacing 'these students' with 'young people' keeps reference consistent and completing the idea with 'to get what they need' clarifies the benefit. Ensure pronoun/reference clarity and complete the action.'