Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và cụm từ không đúng (ví dụ: "has raised flamboyant flowers as is simple"). Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (vị trí, đặc điểm nổi bật) dùng cấu trúc câu ngắn, tránh câu quá dài. Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp như "coastal city", "northern Vietnam", "known for".

例: I come from Haiphong, a coastal city in northern Vietnam. It is known for its busy port and beautiful flamboyant trees that bloom brightly in summer.

提案: Cần sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp ("food remote" không đúng; "they are always remind me" sai cấu trúc). Trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng: nêu điều bạn thích (ví dụ: ẩm thực, khung cảnh), rồi dùng liên từ để giải thích và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng từ vựng chính xác cho địa danh và cảm xúc.

例: I especially like the food in my hometown because it is delicious and distinctive. For example, local dishes at Nam Cam Bay are very fresh and always remind me of home.

提案: Câu trả lời khá tốt: câu chủ đề rõ ràng, có lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Tuy nhiên cần rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn (tối đa 5 câu) và sửa một vài chỗ nhỏ về cách diễn đạt để trôi chảy hơn. Có thể thêm liên từ để liên kết ý.

例: I have lived in my hometown since I was born. I love it because my parents still live there, and I have many happy childhood memories, such as playing in the old park near our house.

提案: Câu trả lời lộn xộn, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và ý mâu thuẫn. Cần phát biểu rõ quan điểm (Yes/No), giải thích lý do cụ thể và tránh lặp từ. Sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản: chủ đề → lý do → ví dụ/so sánh. Sửa lỗi về động từ, đại từ và số nhiều/số ít.

例: Yes, I think my hometown is a good place for young people because the cost of living is much lower than in Hanoi. For example, rent and food are much cheaper, so young people can save money or start their careers more easily.

× I live in Haiphong, which is a coastal city in the north of Vietnam and has raised flamboyant flowers as is simple.

✓ I live in Haiphong, which is a coastal city in the north of Vietnam and is known for its simple, flamboyant flowers.

The sentence uses awkward and incorrect adjective phrases. 'Has raised flamboyant flowers as is simple' is ungrammatical. Use 'is known for' to describe a characteristic and place adjectives in a logical order: 'simple, flamboyant flowers'. Suggestion: use clear adjective phrases and idiomatic verbs like 'is known for' or 'is famous for'.

× I like my hometown's food remote because it is delicious and unique.

✓ I like my hometown's food a lot because it is delicious and unique.

'Remote' is incorrectly used; it is not a quantifier or adverb here. The intended meaning is emphasis, so use 'a lot' or 'very much'. Suggestion: use appropriate adverbs/adverbial phrases to show degree (a lot, very much, really).

× Especially localities like Bandagua and Namco Bay, they are always remind me of homes.

✓ Places such as Bandagua and Nam Co Bay always remind me of home.

The original has redundant subject 'they' and incorrect verb form 'remind' with 'always'. Remove redundancy and use correct noun 'home' (not 'homes') for feeling of belonging; correct name spacing 'Nam Co Bay'. Suggestion: avoid redundant subjects and use correct verb forms: 'always remind me'.

× I have lived in my hometown since I was born.

✓ I have lived in my hometown since I was born.

This sentence is correct. It properly uses the present perfect with 'since' to indicate an action from the past continuing to the present. No change needed.

× I really love it because my parents still live there and it has many happy childhood memories such as playing the old park near our house.

✓ I really love it because my parents still live there and I have many happy childhood memories, such as playing in the old park near our house.

The phrase 'it has many happy childhood memories' incorrectly assigns memories to the town; use 'I have'. Also use the preposition 'in' with 'playing' and include a comma before the example. Suggestion: assign experiences to the experiencer (I) and use correct prepositions.

× In my opinion, my hometown is a good place for young people because it's they can't afford their life because their expenses is very cheap.

✓ In my opinion, my hometown is a good place for young people because many of them can afford to live there since living costs are very low.

Original mixes pronouns and contractions incorrectly ('it's they can't'). Also 'their expenses is' has subject-verb agreement errors and wrong noun choice. Use 'many of them' for people and 'living costs are very low' for correct agreement. Suggestion: avoid stacking clauses with contractions and ensure pronoun-verb agreement.

× It's not it's not expensive like Hanoi and.

✓ It is not as expensive as Hanoi.

The sentence repeats 'it's not' and ends with a dangling 'and'. Use the comparative structure 'not as expensive as' to compare two places. Suggestion: use proper comparative patterns and avoid repetition and incomplete conjunctions.