Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız net fakat karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Soruya doğrudan kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın (örn. “My hometown is Germany.”), sonra gerekliyse Türkiye’de yaşadığınızı ve sebeplerini kısaca ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve uzun bağlaçları azaltın. Ayrıca ‘born’ için doğru yapı "I was born there" kullandığınızda devamında geçmiş zaman ile uyumlu açıklama verin. Örnek cümle sayısını 3-4 ile sınırlayın.

例: My hometown is in Germany; I was born there and my father is German. However, I have lived in Turkey for many years and currently live here with my mother.

提案: Cevabınız belirsiz ve anlaşılması zor. Önce hangi şehirden bahsettiğinizi netleştirin (Germany or Turkey) ve ardından açık, spesifik bir özellik verin (ör. parklar, insanlar, yemekler). Dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin ve gereksiz ifadeleri (ör. "most perfect" veya anlamsız kelimeler) çıkartın. Cümleleri 2-3 kısa cümleyle sınırlayın ve bağlaçlar kullanın.

例: I’m actually referring to Turkey, because I grew up here. What I like most about my hometown are the friendly neighbours and the local markets, where you can buy fresh food and meet people.

提案: Cevabınız süreyi net ve doğru dil bilgisi ile belirtmiyor. Sorunun zaman ifadesine cevap verirken "I have lived here for..." şeklini kullanın ve yaş yerine geçirilen süreyi söyleyin. Ayrıca ek bilgi verirken bağlaç kullanın ve dilbilgisi (have/has, don’t -> doesn’t) hatalarını düzeltin. Cevabı iki cümle ile sınırlayın.

例: I have lived here for about 15 or 16 years, and I still live in this city. My mother doesn’t want to stay here, but I’m okay with living here for now.

提案: Cevabınız fikirleri netçe ayırıyor fakat ifade biçimi ve kelime kullanımı hatalı. Önce hangi ülkeyi kastettiğinizi belirtin, sonra kısa nedenler verin. "Elegant" yerine daha uygun kelimeler kullanın (e.g. "good for education, safe, offers opportunities"). "Criminal stuffs" yerine "crime" veya "safety issues" deyin. Bağlaçlarla iki görüşü karşılaştırın ve cümle sayısını 2-3 ile sınırlayın.

例: If I think about Germany, yes — it offers good educational opportunities and is quite safe for young people. In contrast, in my hometown in Turkey I feel there are more safety and crime issues, so it feels less suitable for teenagers.

× My hometown is Germany because I was born there and my father is German. However, I lived in Turkey for many years and I'm still living here with my mother.

✓ My hometown is in Germany because I was born there and my father is German; however, I have lived in Turkey for many years and I'm still living here with my mother.

The sentence mixes location and residence tenses. 'My hometown is Germany' needs preposition 'in'. Use present perfect 'have lived' to indicate an action that began in the past and continues to the present. Also combine clauses with appropriate punctuation for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I never been in German, I just born there and when I was there I came with my mother to Turkey.

✓ I have never been to Germany; I was only born there, and when I was very young my mother came with me to Turkey.

Use present perfect 'have never been' for life experience up to now. 'German' should be the country name 'Germany' and the correct preposition is 'to'. 'I just born there' is ungrammatical — use passive past 'I was born there'. Clarify timing with 'very young' and correct verb for moving: 'came with me to Turkey'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× So I'm talking about Turkey. And the most perfect thing is I guess it will be on Scabbard, the Turkey leaders.

✓ So I'm talking about Turkey. I think the best thing is the cultural diversity and the hospitality of the people, rather than political leaders.

Original sentence is unclear and contains vocabulary errors ('most perfect', 'on Scabbard') and awkward structure. Rephrase to express a clear idea. Avoid literal translations and incorrect word choices. Grammar problem type ID:26

× 16 or 15 years old and I'm still living in here. However, my mother don't want to live in this city and I'm OK with it.

✓ I have been living here for about 15 or 16 years and I'm still living here. However, my mother doesn't want to live in this city and I'm okay with that.

To express duration, use 'have been living ... for X years'. 'don't' must agree with third-person singular 'my mother', so use 'doesn't'. 'in here' should be 'here'. 'I'm OK with it' is better as 'I'm okay with that' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:27

× If I say Germany, yes absolutely because Germany is so elegant place for students or teenagers.

✓ If I mean Germany, then yes, absolutely, because Germany is a very good place for students and teenagers.

Use 'means' or 'mean' depending on subject; here 'I mean Germany' or 'If I mean Germany' is correct. 'so elegant place' is ungrammatical — use 'a very good place'. Also plural 'teenagers' fine. Adjust article 'a' before singular countable noun. Grammar problem type ID:2

× But if I will talk about Turkey, I don't think so because so many criminal stuffs doing in here.

✓ But if I talk about Turkey, I don't think so because many crimes are committed here.

Do not use 'will' after 'if' for a general present situation — use present simple 'if I talk'. 'so many criminal stuffs' is incorrect: use 'many crimes' or 'a lot of crime'. Use passive 'are committed' or active 'people commit crimes' and use 'here' not 'in here'. Grammar problem type ID:26