Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰但有重复与语法小错误。应直接以一句主题句开头，然后用1–2个简短句子给出具体细节并用连接词衔接，避免冗余末尾残句（如“and.”）。注意时态和句子完整性。

例: My hometown is Shanghai; I have lived there since I was born. It is a very modern and beautiful city, famous for its brightly lit skyline. Moreover, daily life is convenient because shops and public transport are always nearby.

提案: 内容具体但有重复（多次说“convenient”）和语音填充词（“and, I”）。回答应用连接词组织信息，并提供更多不同方面的细节（如娱乐、食物或文化），每点用一两个句子扩展。

例: I like Shanghai's modern infrastructure and lively atmosphere. For example, the metro system is efficient, so I can get to school or friends' houses within 30 minutes. I also enjoy the colorful night views and the variety of restaurants.

提案: 回答包含主要信息但语法时态错误（应使用现在完成时“have lived”）。可以先用一句简洁的时间陈述，然后用连接词说明变化并给出具体例子（如新地标、交通改善）。避免过多泛泛表达。

例: I have lived in Shanghai since I was born, so about 13 years. Over that time the city has modernised a lot — for instance, many new subway lines and skyscrapers have been built — and I’m excited to see its future development.

提案: 回答有逻辑且具体，但表达略显啰嗦（重复“school/education”）。可以用一两句分别说明教育资源和其它对年轻人有利的方面（如就业或娱乐），并用连词过渡。

例: Yes, I think Shanghai is great for young people because it offers excellent schools and diverse educational opportunities. In addition, there are many internships and cultural activities that help young people gain experience and enjoy city life.

× My hometown is Shanghai and I have been living in Shanghai since I was born.

✓ My hometown is Shanghai, and I have lived in Shanghai since I was born.

原句使用现在完成进行时（have been living）表达“从出生起一直住在上海”，在这种表示从过去持续到现在的情况时，更常用现在完成时（have lived）。使用现在完成进行时会给人强调动作持续中的临时性或过程性，而“从出生起一直居住”是一个持续的状态，使用现在完成时更自然且符合习题场景。建议：用“have lived”来表达从过去持续到现在的状态。

× I think that it is a very beautiful city and you can see the lights on the buildings.

✓ I think it is a very beautiful city, and you can see the lights on its buildings.

原句语序和连词使用基本可理解，但“the lights on the buildings”略显笼统，加入所有格“its buildings”使表述更自然，且在两部分之间加逗号有助于句子结构清晰。建议：在复合句中使用逗号分隔并用适当限定词使名词短语更明确。

× It's also a very modern and convenient city so that you can buy things just outside your door and.

✓ It's also a very modern and convenient city, so you can buy things just outside your door.

原句末尾多余的连词“and”导致句子不完整；此外“so that”常用于表示目的，而这里应使用结果连词“so”。因此应删除句末“and”并用逗号连接两部分。建议：去掉多余的“and”，用“so”表示结果并用逗号分隔分句。

× Well, it's very modern and, and I I can see the colorful lights and also it's very convenient.

✓ Well, it's very modern, and I can see the colorful lights. It's also very convenient.

原句存在重复词（"and, and"、"I I"）导致口语错误与书面不规范，应去掉重复并把内容分为两句以提高清晰度。建议：检查并删除重复词，必要时将长句拆为两句。

× For example, I often go to school through the metro network.

✓ For example, I often go to school by the metro.

原句中的“through the metro network”用法不地道，通常用介词短语“by the metro/by subway”表示交通方式。问题属于介词或短语使用不当（与第11项相关），但更贴切地调整为介词+交通工具表达。建议：使用“by the metro/subway”来表达乘坐地铁。

× So I think that it is very convenient and I can almost get anywhere in 30 minutes.

✓ So I think it is very convenient, and I can get almost anywhere in 30 minutes.

原句时态无大问题，但词序“almost get anywhere”更自然置于“get”之后前置“almost”稍显不自然。调整词序并加逗号提高可读性。建议：把副词位置放在常见的位置以使句子更地道。

× How long have you lived there? I live in Shanghai since I was born, so that's about 13 years.

✓ I have lived in Shanghai since I was born, so that's about 13 years.

原句用现在时“I live... since”与时间状语“since I was born”冲突，应使用现在完成时来表示从过去持续到现在的动作或状态（见第6项）。因此将时态改为现在完成时。建议：遇到“since/from ...”类时间短语，使用现在完成时（have/has + 过去分词）。

× The city has changed a lot during that time and become much more modern and I'm looking forward to seeing how it will develop in the future.

✓ The city has changed a lot during that time and has become much more modern, and I'm looking forward to seeing how it will develop in the future.

原句中并列谓语“has changed... and become”缺少助动词“has”导致结构不完整，正确形式应在并列部分重复完成时态的助动词。建议：在并列的完成时态谓语前加上“has”。

× Well, yes, it is because in Shanghai you can receive very good learning environments and there are many good high schools and middle schools all around Shanghai, and it's very convenient to go to the school.

✓ Well, yes, it is, because in Shanghai you can receive a very good learning environment, and there are many good high schools and middle schools across Shanghai, so it's very convenient to go to school.

原句存在多个问题：1）“receive very good learning environments”中“environments”不需要复数且动词“receive”与“learning environment”搭配不自然，改为“receive a very good learning environment”；2）“all around Shanghai”可更自然表达为“across Shanghai”；3）“go to the school”一般指去特定学校，谈泛指上学应说“go to school”。这些问题涉及数量词与冠词使用（第14和第22项）。建议：使用单数名词搭配不定冠词并用恰当介词短语以及泛指表达“go to school”。