Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add one or two specific details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect plurals.

例: My hometown is Kumong Raven, a small town near the Vietnam border. It is surrounded by mountains and has abundant natural scenery, such as forests and rivers.

提案: Answer directly, avoid filler words, and use linking words to organize reasons. Use correct collocations (e.g., "natural scenery," "forests") and give one specific example to support your opinion.

例: I like my hometown because of its natural scenery. For example, I often go hiking in the nearby forest and swim in the river, which helps me relax and stay active.

提案: Use the correct present perfect or simple present/past structure to express duration. State the time clearly and concisely with proper grammar and a topic sentence. Avoid misplaced words.

例: I have lived there for 17 years since I was born.

提案: Give a clear yes/no response with a brief reason and at least one specific detail. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct word choice (e.g., "place," not "plan").

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers outdoor activities like hiking and swimming, and the community is safe and friendly for families.

× there are a lot of mountain around there

✓ there are a lot of mountains around there

The noun 'mountain' must be plural when used with 'a lot of' which refers to many items. Use 'mountains' to agree in number with the quantifier. Suggestion: use plural nouns after quantifiers like 'many', 'a lot of'.

× There are really good natural

✓ There is a really good natural environment / The nature there is really good

The phrase 'really good natural' is incomplete: 'natural' is an adjective and needs a noun (e.g., 'environment' or 'scenery') or rephrase using 'nature'. Also 'There are' should be 'There is' if followed by a singular noun like 'environment'. Suggestion: add a noun after 'natural' or use 'nature' as the subject and adjust the verb accordingly.

× I would like say I really like my hometown

✓ I would like to say I really like my hometown

After 'would like' we require the infinitive form 'to say', not the bare verb. Use 'would like to + base verb'. Suggestion: remember the pattern 'would like to do something'.

× because I love natural forest, mountain, river

✓ because I love the natural forests, mountains, and rivers

The list of nouns needs appropriate plural forms and articles; commas should separate items and include 'and' before the last item. Use plural nouns to indicate general preference. Suggestion: use 'the' for general natural features of a place and pluralize the nouns when speaking generally.

× I am a natural person

✓ I am a nature person / I am a person who loves nature

'Natural person' is an incorrect collocation here; native speakers say 'person who loves nature' or 'nature lover'. 'Natural person' is a legal term. Suggestion: use 'nature lover' or 'a person who loves nature'.

× I has been lose their since I was born for 17 years

✓ I have lived there since I was born; I'm 17 years old

Multiple errors: 'has' should be 'have' with subject 'I' (subject-verb agreement). 'been lose' is incorrect — use present perfect 'have lived' to express duration. 'their' is wrong pronoun; use 'there'. 'since I was born for 17 years' mixes 'since' with a duration phrase; use 'since I was born' to indicate start point, and state the age separately if needed. Suggestion: use 'I have lived there since I was born' or 'I have lived there for 17 years'.

× Yes, a good plan for young people

✓ Yes, it's a good place for young people

The original lacks a verb and uses 'plan' incorrectly. The examiner asked if the hometown is a good place; answer should be a complete sentence with subject and verb such as 'Yes, it's a good place for young people.' Suggestion: use 'place' rather than 'plan' and include the verb 'is' or contraction 'it's'.