Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümlelerinizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için tam ve mantıklı cümleler kurun. İlk cümle doğru ve bilgilendirici fakat ikinci cümlede eksik ve anlamsız ifadeler var. Detay verirken bağlaçlar kullanın ve özellikleri belirgin şekilde açıklayın. Örneğin "there are a lot of historical places and different" yerine hangi tarihi yerlerin olduğunu veya şehrin diğer şehirlerden nasıl farklı olduğunu açıkça ifade edin. Ayrıca cümle sayısını 3–4 ile sınırlayın ve gereksiz tekrar veya eksik kelimelerden kaçının.

例: My hometown is Bursa, which is located in the Marmara region of Turkey. It is famous for its historical mosques and Ottoman architecture, such as the Grand Mosque and the Silk Market. The city is also known for its thermal baths and green parks, which make it both culturally rich and pleasant to visit.

提案: Soruyu doğrudan cevaplayın ve neden sevdiğinizi açıkça belirtin. Mevcut cevap anlaşılmaz ve eksik; kelime ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Bir konu cümlesi ile başlayın (I like... / I enjoy...), ardından iki kısa destekleyici cümle ile sebep ve bir örnek verin. Bağlaçlar (because, so, for example) kullanarak mantıklı akış sağlayın.

例: I like my hometown because it combines history and nature. For example, people can visit historical sites like old mosques and then relax in nearby parks or thermal baths. This mix of culture and outdoor space makes it an enjoyable place to spend time.

提案: Cevabınızı net ve doğrudan ifade edin; mevcut cevap tamamen karışık ve anlaşılmaz. Sorulan soru süre ile ilgili olduğu için basit bir zaman ifadesi kullanın (I have lived there since I was born / for X years). Gereksiz veya alakasız detaylardan kaçının. Daha sonra kısa bir ek bilgi (örneğin aile hareketleri) verecekseniz, düzgün bir dil bilgisiyle ve bağlaçla ekleyin.

例: I have lived in Bursa since I was born, so I have spent my whole life there. My family used to live in a small neighborhood, but some relatives moved to other cities for work.

提案: Evet/hayır ile başlayan net bir görüş sunun, ardından nedenini açıkça belirtin ve bağlaç kullanın. Mevcut cevapta dilbilgisi hataları ve belirsiz ifadeler var ("keen on visiting", "As thanks to"). Gençlerin ne tür aktivitelerden faydalandığını, öğrenebilecekleri şeyleri veya eğlence seçeneklerini spesifik örneklerle açıklayın. Cümleleri 2–4 arası tutun ve yanlış kalıpları düzeltin.

例: Yes, I think Bursa is a good place for young people because there are many cultural events and outdoor activities. For example, young people can attend music festivals, visit museums, or go hiking on Uludağ. These opportunities help them learn new skills and enjoy their free time.

× There are a lot of historical places and different.

✓ There are a lot of historical places and different kinds of attractions.

Original sentence uses 'different' as a standalone word; this is incomplete. Use a noun after 'different' or a phrase such as 'different kinds of attractions' to be grammatical. Suggestion: add a noun to complete the idea (e.g., 'different kinds of attractions').

× My hometown is very common city for.

✓ My hometown is a very common city in my country.

The original sentence is missing the article 'a' and the preposition and object of 'for' are incorrect. Correct structure: 'a very common city in my country.' Suggestion: include the indefinite article before singular countable noun and use 'in my country' to indicate location.

× My country.

✓ in my country.

This fragment 'My country.' is not a full sentence and lacks connection to previous clause. It should be part of the previous sentence: 'in my country.' Suggestion: combine fragments to form a complete sentence.

× Everyone want to go?

✓ Does everyone want to go?

Interrogative sentence with 'everyone' requires third-person singular verb 'wants' or auxiliary 'does' plus base verb. For questions use 'Does everyone want to go?'. Suggestion: Form yes/no question with auxiliary 'does'.

× When I was a since I was born.

✓ I have lived there since I was born.

Original mixes structures 'When I was...' and 'since I was born' causing ungrammatical phrasing. For duration from birth to present use present perfect: 'I have lived there since I was born.' Suggestion: Use 'have lived' + 'since' with a point in time.

× I actually my father born in cars, but they moved.

✓ Actually my father was born in Çarşı, but they moved later.

Original misses the verb 'was' and 'born' needs passive construction 'was born'. 'cars' appears to be a misspelling/capitalization of a place name (Çarşı) and 'they moved' needs an adverb 'later' for clarity. Suggestion: use passive for birth 'was born' and add 'later' to 'moved'.

× Worse.

✓ It was worse.

Single-word fragment 'Worse.' is not a complete sentence. To be grammatical, include a subject and verb: 'It was worse.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; write full clauses.

× Yes, to be honest, young people keen on visiting my hometown.

✓ Yes, to be honest, young people are keen on visiting my hometown.

Missing auxiliary verb 'are' for the adjective phrase 'keen on'. In English, 'keen on' describing people requires 'be' verb. Suggestion: include correct form of 'be' to match plural subject 'young people' ('are').

× As thanks to Bursa's activities, they can learn different.

✓ Thanks to Bursa's activities, they can learn different things.

'As thanks to' is incorrect; use 'Thanks to' or 'Due to'. Also 'learn different' needs an object—use 'different things' or 'various things'. Suggestion: use 'Thanks to' and add a noun after 'different'.