Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, correct geographic phrasing, then add one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (e.g., use 'in the center of' and avoid repeating 'I love it').

例: My hometown is Chongju, which is in the centre of South Korea. I like it because it’s very peaceful and has plenty of green spaces, so it’s a relaxing place to grow up.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') correctly and avoid confusing place names. Limit to 2–3 sentences and fix subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there are a lot of cafes').

例: I enjoy visiting cafés in my hometown because there are many of them. Because property and rent are cheaper in the surrounding countryside, small independent cafés can open easily, so there is a wide variety to choose from.

提案: Use the present perfect for duration (if you still live there) or simple past clearly if you moved. Be concise: give a direct answer, then add one specific detail about your experience. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I was born' and 'I grew up there').

例: I lived in Chongju for twenty years before starting university. I was born and raised there, so I have many fond memories of school friends and local festivals.

提案: Answer directly then support with specific reasons and a linking word. Avoid confusion of place names (Chongju vs Chengdu). Offer a balanced view if possible (mention some positives). Use correct articles and plural forms (e.g., 'exhibitions' and 'musicals').

例: Not really. I don’t think Chongju offers many cultural activities that young people often look for, such as exhibitions or musicals. However, it is affordable and peaceful, which some young people might appreciate.

× It is located the center of Korea.

✓ It is located in the center of Korea.

Missing preposition 'in' before a noun phrase indicating location. Use 'located in' to indicate a place. Suggestion: include 'in' for correct prepositional phrase.

× I love my hometown because it is very peaceful and calm.

✓ I love my hometown because it is very peaceful and calm.

No grammatical error detected relative to the provided list; sentence is acceptable. Keep 'peaceful and calm' as adjectives modifying 'hometown'.

× Actually, I like to visit a cafe because Chengzhou have a lot of cafe because Chongzheng has a widespread and the countryside is cheaper, so there are many.

✓ Actually, I like to visit cafes because Chongju has a lot of cafés; Chongju is widespread and the countryside is cheaper, so there are many cafés.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('Chengzhou have' should be singular 'Chengju has') and plural noun use ('a lot of cafe' should be 'a lot of cafés'). Also confusing place names: consistent spelling 'Chongju' used. Preposition/structure improved by splitting clauses and using semicolon. Suggestions: ensure subject matches verb number and use plural for countable nouns when referring to many.

× I lived there for 20 years before I entered university.

✓ I lived there for 20 years before I entered university.

Sentence is grammatically correct for past duration before another past event; no change needed.

× I born in Chengdu and I grew up, so there are many good memories in my life.

✓ I was born in Chengdu and I grew up there, so I have many good memories.

Missing auxiliary 'was' for passive past participle 'born' (should be 'was born'). 'Grew up' requires an adverbial place 'there' for clarity. 'There are many good memories in my life' is unnatural; use 'I have many good memories'. Suggestions: use passive 'was born' and match subjects for possession ('I have').

× Maybe not. I think Chengdu is not good place for young people because young people want to experience many things such as exhibition and musicals, but Chengdu doesn't have that.

✓ Maybe not. I think Chengdu is not a good place for young people because young people want to experience many things such as exhibitions and musicals, but Chengdu doesn't have those.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'good place'. 'Exhibition' should be plural 'exhibitions' to match 'many things'. Use plural pronoun 'those' to refer back to plural noun. Suggestions: include articles for singular countable nouns and match plural forms and pronouns.