Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, concise location statement using correct place names and grammar. Avoid invented or unclear phrases and keep it to one or two sentences. For example, state the town/city and the region or country it belongs to, and correct any mistaken terms.

例: I come from Cavite City, which is a coastal city in the province of Cavite in the Philippines. It is part of the Calabarzon region, south of Manila.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence explaining what you like, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because or such as). Avoid repetition and unclear place names; be specific about historical sites or events and explain why they matter to you.

例: I really like the history of my hometown because it has many historic markets and old buildings. For example, the 13 Markets district has preserved colonial-era shops and local festivals, which makes the area interesting and lively.

提案: Answer directly with the exact length of time you have lived there (or explain uncertainty clearly), and give a brief supporting detail if needed. Use a single clear sentence: either state the number of years or clarify that you grew up there with family.

例: I have lived in Cavite for about 30 years because my grandparents and parents have lived there for decades and I grew up in the same neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear opinion in the topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like because or for example to make your answer coherent. Explain what opportunities or activities benefit young people (education, sports, cultural events).

例: Yes, I think Cavite is a good place for young people because it offers many historical sites and local museums where students can learn outside school. For example, teenagers often visit the old markets and heritage houses on school trips, which helps them understand local culture.

× I live at Trusted Motorist city Cavite, which is the capital of Kabuto.

✓ I live in Trusted Motorist City, Cavite, which is the capital of Kabuto.

Use 'in' for cities and towns (preposition error). Also capitalize proper nouns and add a comma between city and province. Recommend: use 'in' for locations within cities and punctuate proper nouns correctly.

× What I like about my hometown is the history, the history of Kabuto.

✓ What I like about my hometown is its history, the history of Kabuto.

Sentence lacks possessive adjective for 'hometown' (use of adjective/pronoun). Use 'its' to show the history belongs to the hometown. Suggest using 'its history' to be concise and grammatically correct.

× There are many history here, like the 13 markets, which is the which is my hometown, the Tresa, Madrid city, Kavita.

✓ There is much history here, such as the 13 markets, which are in my hometown, Tresa, Madrid City, Kavita.

'History' is an uncountable noun, so use 'much' not 'many' (quantifier error). Also subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'markets' plural requires 'are'. Clean up redundant phrase 'which is the which is'. Use 'such as' to give examples and correct place name formatting.

× My grandparents and parents lived here, so I think 30 years.

✓ My grandparents and parents have lived here for about 30 years.

Use present perfect 'have lived' to describe a period continuing to the present (tense error). Also include 'for' with durations and 'about' for approximation. Original 'so I think 30 years' is awkward; replace with 'for about 30 years'.

× I think my hometown is a good place for young people because it has a history where young people can learn.

✓ I think my hometown is a good place for young people because it has a history that young people can learn from.

The original uses 'where' awkwardly with 'history'; better to use 'that ... can learn from' for correct clause formation (present tense and clause structure). This clarifies the relationship and improves fluency.