Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and add a clear topic sentence with one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and fix word order and articles. Use a linking phrase if adding a second detail.

例: I come from Huilien in eastern Taiwan. It’s a small coastal city with a population of around 100,000, known for its beautiful mountains and beaches.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating what you like, then give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rich in natural landscapes', 'remote from the capital') and avoid vague phrases.

例: I like Huilien because it is rich in natural landscapes. For example, we have dramatic mountains, clear rivers and coastal scenery, and it’s far from the capital so life feels quieter and less crowded.

提案: Give a direct time-based topic sentence, then briefly clarify with one specific detail. Use correct time expressions and avoid run-on sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' only if adding reason.

例: I have lived there for about 30 years, on and off since I was born. Whenever I have the chance, I prefer to return because I enjoy the relaxed lifestyle.

提案: Start with a clear overall judgment and then present two balanced points using linking phrases ('on the one hand... on the other hand...'). Be specific about opportunities and drawbacks and correct grammar (e.g., 'educational opportunities'). Keep to two or three concise sentences.

例: It depends. On the one hand, it’s good for young people because they grow up in a safe, natural environment with low pollution. On the other hand, big cities offer more educational and job opportunities, so some young people move away for study or work.

× I come from Taiwan Hui Lian which is is side of Taiwan and it is a small city with a few populations.

✓ I come from Huilian, Taiwan, which is on the east side of Taiwan and is a small city with a small population.

Errors: redundant 'is', wrong preposition 'side of Taiwan' should be 'on the east side of Taiwan', and 'a few populations' is incorrect collocation; use 'a small population' or 'few people'. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use 'on the east side' for location, and use 'small population' for count nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I like it. It is a small city and reach of natural landscape. For example our city is remote found capital city so we have a lot.

✓ I like it. It is a small city and rich in natural landscapes. For example, our city is remote compared with the capital city, so we have a lot of natural scenery.

Errors: 'reach' is incorrect word choice; use 'rich'. 'Natural landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' or 'natural scenery'. 'Remote found capital city' is ungrammatical; meant 'remote compared with the capital city'. Suggestion: use 'rich in' for abundance, pluralize nouns appropriately, and use clear comparison phrases like 'compared with the capital city'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I would say on and off approximately around 30 years since I was born when every time I had a chance I would still choose go back here to live.

✓ I would say I have lived there on and off for about 30 years since I was born. Whenever I have the chance, I still choose to come back and live here.

Errors: tense and structure problems. 'Since I was born' requires present perfect ('have lived') for actions continuing to present. 'On and off approximately around 30 years' is redundant; use 'on and off for about 30 years'. 'Choose go back' needs infinitive 'to come back'. Suggestion: use present perfect for duration from past to present, remove redundancies, and include correct infinitives. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× It depends. On the one hand, young people live here, they can grow in the natural environment with safe place. On the other hand, people live in the big city, they can have more opportunity to educate.

✓ It depends. On the one hand, young people who live here can grow up in a natural environment and in a safe place. On the other hand, people who live in big cities can have more opportunities for education.

Errors: sentence fragments and incorrect noun forms. 'Young people live here, they can' should be combined with a relative clause or coordinated properly. Use 'grow up' rather than 'grow' for maturing, 'safe place' needs article 'a', 'big city' should be plural 'big cities' when speaking generally, and 'more opportunity to educate' is incorrect; use 'more opportunities for education' or 'more educational opportunities'. Suggestion: use relative clauses ('who live here'), correct verb phrases ('grow up'), pluralize where generalizing, and use correct noun phrases for 'opportunities for education'. Grammar problem type ID: 16}]} }<!-- Output trimmed to match interface -->