Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar and pronunciation, and make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting points using linking words. Correct articles, verb forms and small typos (e.g., “Is is” → “It is”, “also affordable” → “it is also affordable”).

例: My hometown is Namianguju, which is near Seoul. It combines city conveniences with a quiet, green environment, so I can access shops and transport easily while enjoying peaceful surroundings. In addition, it is affordable compared with Seoul, which makes living there comfortable for me.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and link supporting details logically. Fix sentence fragments and noun forms (e.g., “full of flower” → “full of flowers”). Avoid awkward phrasing like “one way fully charging myself”; instead explain the effect. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

例: I like visiting a stream called Wangsuk because it is very peaceful and full of flowers. I often walk there with my mother, and the fresh air and scenery help me relax and recharge. As a result, it is my favorite place to clear my mind when I’m stressed.

提案: Provide a direct, grammatically correct response with a clear timeline and a brief explanation. Correct pronoun and tense errors (e.g., “I believe there for most of my life” → “I have lived there for most of my life”). Avoid unnecessary words and ensure coherence.

例: I have lived in Namianguju for most of my life, apart from a few years I spent studying abroad. Altogether, I have been there for about 25 years, which is why I feel very attached to the place.

提案: Answer directly and give specific examples. Improve grammar (e.g., “convenience facility” → “convenient facilities”), use plural/singular correctly, and use linking words to compare or give reasons. Keep it natural and concise.

例: Yes, I think it is a good place for young people, especially children. Although the town is small, it has convenient facilities such as clinics, good schools and a cinema, so families can access essential services easily.

× Well my hometown is Namianguju which is near Seoul. Is is good.

✓ Well, my hometown is Namianguju, which is near Seoul. It is good.

Original contains 'Is is' which is a typographical error and also missing commas around the non-restrictive clause. Use 'It is' as the correct subject-verb and add commas: 'Namianguju, which is near Seoul.' This fixes the 'there be' style confusion and subject reference.

× It has good balance between city life and quiet environment.

✓ It has a good balance between city life and a quiet environment.

Missing articles 'a' before 'good balance' and 'a' before 'quiet environment' are required with singular, countable nouns. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× It also affordable so that's why I feel very comfortable living there.

✓ It is also affordable, so that's why I feel very comfortable living there.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' linking subject and adjective. Adding 'is' creates the correct subject-linking verb-adjective structure. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× I like going to a stream called Wangsuk is very peaceful and full of flower and I often go there for a walk with my mom because it's so relaxing.

✓ I like going to a stream called Wangsuk; it is very peaceful and full of flowers, and I often go there for a walk with my mom because it's so relaxing.

Original is a run-on sentence lacking appropriate clause separation and has noun plurality error ('flower' should be 'flowers'). Separate clauses with a semicolon or period, use 'it is' to refer to the stream, and pluralize 'flowers'. This fixes sentence structure and agreement.

× So it's my one way fully charging myself.

✓ So it's my way of fully recharging myself.

Phrase 'one way fully charging myself' is ungrammatical. Use the idiomatic expression 'my way of fully recharging myself' or 'a way to fully recharge myself'. This corrects the noun phrase and gerund usage.

× I believe there for most of my life I stayed abroad and they go for a few years, so it's been about 25 years, so I really feel attached to that.

✓ I have lived there for most of my life. I stayed abroad for a few years, but overall it's been about 25 years, so I really feel attached to it.

Mixed and incorrect tenses and pronouns: use present perfect 'have lived' to indicate duration up to now; use past simple 'stayed abroad' for a completed action; 'they go' is incorrect pronoun/verb; replace with 'for a few years'. Also use 'attached to it' (correct pronoun) not 'that'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× Well, I think so. My place is good for young people, especially children, because the city is not very big, but it's still convenient and there are a lot of convenience facility like clinic, school and cinema.

✓ Well, I think so. My hometown is good for young people, especially children, because the city is not very big, but it's still convenient and there are a lot of convenient facilities like clinics, schools, and a cinema.

Multiple issues: 'My place' is informal—'my hometown' is clearer. 'convenience facility' is wrong; use adjective 'convenient facilities' and pluralize the countable nouns 'clinic' and 'school'. Also use article 'a' before 'cinema' or plural 'cinemas' depending on meaning. This corrects adjective use, plurality, and article usage.