Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "work, in home works" and try to use more natural phrases such as "homework". Also, try to limit your answer to 3-4 sentences and use linking words to improve flow.

例: No, I didn't do puzzles as a child because I was very busy with school and homework. I rarely had free time to play games like puzzles.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating "puzzles" too often. Use linking words like "however" effectively and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: I am not really a fan of puzzles, so I don't usually play them during trips or when I'm bored. However, sometimes when I'm waiting in line at a restaurant, they offer puzzles to pass the time, and that's when I might play.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, explain your preference or difficulty, and avoid confusing phrases like "very all sensitive about new members". Also, use correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

例: I don't enjoy either type of puzzle, but I find number puzzles more difficult because I'm not good at math. If I had to choose, I would prefer word puzzles.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains errors. Avoid unclear terms like "Pazos" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific benefits for seniors doing puzzles.

例: Definitely, I think puzzles are very helpful for older people because they keep the brain active. Seniors can use puzzles to exercise their memory and attention, which helps maintain mental sharpness.

× I was too busy with school, work, in home works, so I didn't have any spare time for playing puzzles.

✓ I was too busy with school, work, and homework, so I didn't have any spare time for playing puzzles.

The phrase 'in home works' is incorrect. The correct term is 'homework' which is uncountable and does not require a preposition 'in'. Also, 'and' should be used to connect items in a list.

× Personally, I am not a fan of puzzle, so I don't play puzzles either during trip or when I feel bored.

✓ Personally, I am not a fan of puzzles, so I don't play puzzles either during trips or when I feel bored.

The word 'puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles' to match the context. Also, 'during trip' should be 'during trips' to indicate any trip in general.

× However, when I am waiting in line for entering a restaurant, usually they will offer some puzzles for spending our time and that would be the only chance that I would like to play puzzles.

✓ However, when I am waiting in line to enter a restaurant, usually they will offer some puzzles to help pass the time, and that would be the only chance I would like to play puzzles.

The phrase 'waiting in line for entering' is incorrect; it should be 'waiting in line to enter'. Also, 'for spending our time' is awkward; 'to help pass the time' is more natural.

× I don't like either but I believe number puzzles would be more hard for me because I am so bad at math and I am very all sensitive about new members so.

✓ I don't like either, but I believe number puzzles would be harder for me because I am bad at math and I am very sensitive about new members.

The phrase 'more hard' is incorrect; the comparative form is 'harder'. 'So bad' is acceptable but 'bad' alone is sufficient. 'Very all sensitive' is incorrect; it should be 'very sensitive'. The sentence is also fragmented and needs punctuation.

× If I have to pick, I would like to go for work puzzles.

✓ If I have to pick, I would like to go for word puzzles.

The phrase 'work puzzles' is likely a typo and should be 'word puzzles' which is the correct term for puzzles involving words.

× Definitely, I believe Pazos is a very helpful game for all people to keep their brain working an active by playing puzzles.

✓ Definitely, I believe puzzles are a very helpful game for all people to keep their brains active by playing puzzles.

'Pazos' seems to be a typo for 'puzzles'. 'Brain' should be plural 'brains' to agree with 'all people'. 'Working an active' is incorrect; it should be 'active'. Also, 'game' should be plural 'games' or 'activity' to match context.

× Seniors can spend their spare time and they can exercise your brain.

✓ Seniors can spend their spare time and they can exercise their brains.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here; it should be 'their' to agree with the subject 'Seniors'. Also, 'brain' should be plural 'brains' to match 'Seniors'.

× They can also track their attention when they are doing math or some words picking in those math.

✓ They can also improve their attention when they are doing math or word puzzles.

The phrase 'words picking in those math' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'word puzzles' or similar. Also, 'track their attention' is awkward; 'improve their attention' is more appropriate.