Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且内容较为重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并且注意语法正确性。

例: No, I didn't do puzzles in my childhood because my parents didn't allow me to. Instead, I preferred outdoor activities or reading books at home.

提案: 回答内容较为混乱，句子结构不清晰，表达重复。建议使用连贯的句子，明确表达时间和原因，并避免重复。

例: I usually do puzzles during trips with my friends because it helps us pass the time and strengthens our friendship. It's always fun and exciting to solve puzzles together.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但存在语法错误和用词不当。建议注意语法准确性，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I prefer word puzzles because I'm not very good with numbers. Number puzzles are more difficult for me since I don't like math.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子，使用正确的语法，并且表达更具体。

例: Yes, I think puzzles are good for old people because they can get bored staying at home. Doing puzzles helps them pass time and keeps their minds active.

× Actually not, because in my home there's not so many puzzles, because at that time my my parents do not allow me to do so.

✓ Actually not, because in my home there aren't so many puzzles, because at that time my parents did not allow me to do so.

这里的主语是复数puzzles，应该用复数形式的谓语动词，不能用there's（there is的缩写），应改为there aren't。

× Actually not, because in my home there's not so many puzzles, because at that time my my parents do not allow me to do so.

✓ Actually not, because in my home there aren't so many puzzles, because at that time my parents did not allow me to do so.

描述过去的情况，谓语动词应使用过去时态，do not allow应改为did not allow。

× So what well would prefer some outdoor activities or just to stay at home, read some books or join by myself?

✓ So I would prefer some outdoor activities or just stay at home, read some books, or be by myself.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语，且表达不清晰。应补充主语I，调整动词形式，使句子通顺。

× When do you do puzzles, during your trip or when you feel bored?

✓ When do you do puzzles? During your trip or when you feel bored?

原句缺少疑问句的标点，导致句子结构不清晰，应分成两个句子。

× This is always during my trip with a lot of friends around me to spend the time we need to do some puzzles together and think it's very happy to do this with all the friends.

✓ I always do puzzles during my trips with a lot of friends around me to spend time. I think it's very enjoyable to do this with all my friends.

原句时态和结构混乱，需调整为一般现在时，分句清晰，表达更准确。

× and think it's very happy to do this with all the friends.

✓ and think it's very enjoyable to do this with all the friends.

happy是形容人的情绪，不能用来形容做某事的感受，应使用形容词enjoyable。

× It can enhance the relationships between us and it can be very happy and just shout with each other.

✓ It can enhance the relationships between us, and it can be very enjoyable to just shout with each other.

shout后面缺少介词，且happy用法错误，应改为enjoyable，并调整句子结构。

× Actually I prefer the world puzzles because to the numbers I'm not so familiar with it and I'm born not so sensitive about the numbers, so I do not like mathematics.

✓ Actually I prefer word puzzles because I'm not so familiar with numbers and I was not born sensitive to numbers, so I do not like mathematics.

world puzzles应为word puzzles；numbers为复数，后面代词it应去掉；表达出生时的情况应使用过去时态。

× I'm born not so sensitive about the numbers, so I do not like mathematics.

✓ I was not born sensitive to numbers, so I do not like mathematics.

描述出生时的状态应使用过去时态was born，而不是现在时态。

× I think the number puzzles much difficult for me to solve, you know?

✓ I think number puzzles are much more difficult for me to solve, you know?

number puzzles为复数，谓语动词应为are；形容词difficult前应加比较级more。

× Yes, I do. It's a really good choice for the old people to do puzzles because old people were always to be a little bored because they cannot just go out every day.

✓ Yes, I do. It's a really good choice for old people to do puzzles because old people are always a little bored since they cannot go out every day.

old people为复数，谓语动词应为are；句中were always to be结构错误，应改为are always；cannot just go out表达不自然，去掉just。

× They may be tired so they entitled at home, do some puzzles can really pass the time and it's fun.

✓ They may be tired, so they stay at home. Doing some puzzles can really pass the time and it's fun.

entitled用法错误，应为stay；句子缺少连接词，需分句并调整动词形式。