Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid awkward expressions. Also, clarify your points with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I used to do puzzles a lot with my siblings when I was a child. We especially enjoyed crossword puzzles because they were more interesting to us than Sudoku, which we found difficult due to the maths involved.

提案: Your answer has some unclear expressions and grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, try to express your ideas more clearly and naturally.

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored because they help me relax and recharge. However, when I go on trips, I prefer visiting monuments or beaches instead of doing puzzles, as I enjoy exploring new places.

提案: Your answer is clear but repetitive and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to avoid repeating the same ideas and use varied vocabulary. Also, combine sentences for better flow.

例: I enjoy doing word puzzles because they are comfortable and enjoyable for me. On the other hand, I find Sudoku quite difficult since I'm not good at maths, so I tend to avoid number puzzles.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'lots of thing' and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, definitely. Many studies show that doing puzzles can help prevent brain diseases such as Alzheimer's and Parkinson's. Therefore, puzzles are beneficial for older people as they keep the mind active and improve memory, creating a positive and energetic atmosphere.

× Yes, I recall that when I was a child, my siblings and I hung out with each other and do lots of puzzles.

✓ Yes, I recall that when I was a child, my siblings and I hung out with each other and did lots of puzzles.

The sentence mixes past tense 'hung out' with present tense 'do'. To maintain tense consistency, 'do' should be changed to past tense 'did' because the action happened in the past.

× All of us like to do crossword puzzle.

✓ All of us like to do crossword puzzles.

The noun 'puzzle' should be plural 'puzzles' because it refers to multiple instances of crossword puzzles, not just one.

× So it's need to have a mastery of in mathematics.

✓ So it needs to have a mastery of mathematics.

The phrase 'it's need' is incorrect. The correct form is 'it needs' to express necessity. Also, 'of in mathematics' is redundant; 'of mathematics' suffices.

× When I get bored, I prefer to do puzzles, recharges my batteries and lift my sprays, especially when I hang out with my siblings because it produces the energy, atmosphere and we enjoy our time.

✓ When I get bored, I prefer to do puzzles, recharge my batteries and lift my spirits, especially when I hang out with my siblings because it produces energy and atmosphere and we enjoy our time.

The verbs 'recharges' and 'lift' should be in base form 'recharge' and 'lift' to parallel 'prefer to do'. Also, 'sprays' is likely a typo for 'spirits'. 'The energy' and 'atmosphere' do not need 'the' here.

× When I go to a trip, I prefer to visit monuments and the beaches and the like so I don't get bored.

✓ When I go on a trip, I prefer to visit monuments and beaches and the like so I don't get bored.

The correct preposition with 'trip' is 'on', not 'to'. Also, 'the beaches' should be 'beaches' to be consistent and natural.

× I prefer to have other leisure activity compared to do.

✓ I prefer to have other leisure activities instead of doing puzzles.

The phrase 'compared to do' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'instead of doing puzzles' to clearly express preference. Also, 'activity' should be plural 'activities' to match 'other'.

× I like it, but I don't like to Sudoku.

✓ I like it, but I don't like to do Sudoku.

The verb 'like' followed by an action requires 'to do' before the noun 'Sudoku' to form a correct infinitive phrase.

× Lots of articles and studies show that when they do puzzles, it prevents lots of brain diseases like Alzheimer, Parkinson.

✓ Lots of articles and studies show that when they do puzzles, it prevents lots of brain diseases like Alzheimer's and Parkinson's.

The diseases 'Alzheimer' and 'Parkinson' should be possessive forms 'Alzheimer's' and 'Parkinson's' as they are named diseases. Also, 'prevents' is singular and refers to 'it' (doing puzzles), which is correct.

× They will be active and they do them so they cannot forget lots of thing in all the ages and it produces energetic atmosphere for them.

✓ They will be active and they do them so they cannot forget lots of things at all ages and it produces an energetic atmosphere for them.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple items. 'In all the ages' is better expressed as 'at all ages'. Also, 'energetic atmosphere' needs the article 'an' before it.