Puzzles— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문장이 중복되었으며, 문장이 완성되지 않은 부분이 있습니다. 좀 더 명확하고 간결하게 답변을 구성하고, 예시를 구체적으로 들어 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I enjoyed doing puzzles during my childhood, especially those featuring famous artworks like Picasso's paintings. It was a fun way to spend my free time and improve my concentration.

提案: 시제 일관성이 부족하고 문장이 다소 반복적이며, 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 시제를 맞추고, 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I usually do puzzles when I feel bored at home. For example, I often complete puzzles featuring artwork or landscapes to pass the time and keep my mind active.

提案: 문장에 중복과 문법 오류가 있으며, 답변이 명확하지 않습니다. 문법을 정확히 하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I find word puzzles more difficult than number puzzles because I am better at math than English. Therefore, I prefer number puzzles as they are easier for me and more enjoyable.

提案: 답변이 미완성되어 있고 구체적인 설명이 부족합니다. 완전한 문장으로 답변을 마무리하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 들어 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I definitely think puzzles are beneficial for older people because they help keep the brain active and improve memory. For instance, doing puzzles can delay cognitive decline and provide mental stimulation.

× I did puzzles in my childhood while I was having spare time.

✓ I did puzzles in my childhood while I had spare time.

The phrase 'was having' is incorrect here because 'have' in this context is a stative verb and should be used in the simple past tense 'had' instead of the past continuous 'was having'.

× Puzzles I did were usually artworks by Picasso or or.

✓ The puzzles I did were usually artworks by Picasso or others.

The original sentence is missing a subject and contains a repeated word 'or or'. Adding 'The' at the beginning and replacing 'or or' with 'or others' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× While I was at home, I sometimes get bored easily and I usually did some puzzles including artwork or landscape.

✓ While I was at home, I sometimes got bored easily and I usually did some puzzles including artwork or landscapes.

The sentence mixes present tense 'get' with past tense 'was' and 'did'. To maintain tense consistency, 'get' should be changed to past tense 'got'. Also, 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'artwork' as types of puzzles.

× I find word puzzles more are more difficult than number puzzles.

✓ I find word puzzles more difficult than number puzzles.

The phrase 'more are more difficult' is redundant and incorrect. Removing 'are more' corrects the sentence. Also, 'word puzzles' and 'number puzzles' are plural and correctly used here.